Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

Pieter Boelen · May 10, 2008

I agree with Mercer. I like that it is vague, because it makes the audience wonder. We never want to explain everything and if we do explain something, we should add some more things for the audience to be curious about. That keeps the character of Jack somewhat a mystery and might generate interest in a possible next film. So I like the insertion there. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/doff.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :doff

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Old Salt · May 11, 2008

<i>Okay, just some housecleaning here. We have this scene (Jack's GW moment) ready to be entered into the script:</i>

SEA - DAY

Two boats are seen making their way to the shore. In the first boat,
JACK SPARROW is standing heroically in the front. As the boat bumps
into the shore, JACK bumbles from the bow onto the beach. His sailors
also get out. Then the second boat bumps into the shore and Mercer,
Edwards and a contigent of EITC marines get out.

JACK
(looking at the EITC marines)
So what do we need them for again?

MERCER
There might be a time when you'll be happy we took them.
Now let's have that map, if you please.

JACK
(giving Mercer a suspicious look)
As captain on this here venture of your'n, I'll be leadin' the way.

Jack grabs the map and his compass and looks at them.

JACK
(With great authority, he holds the map out
in front of him and barks out an order)
We will be proceeding in THIS direction!
(Jack turns towards the Wench and walks into the sea)

JACK
(putting the map down and looking at the Wench)
That can't be right.

Mercer grabs the map out of Jack's hands, turns it right-side-up, then puts it back into Jack's hands.

JACK
(takes the map from Mercer)
Oh!
(starts walking towards the jungle)
Lack of rum, Mercer. I did warn you.

Mercer rolls his eyes. Then he, Edwards and the EITC marines follow Jack into the jungle.

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<i>And I guess you can add this change into the script as well, Mercer. </i>

BECKETT
Oh, yes, how could I have
forgotten. <i>(Sarcasm creeps
into his voice as he waves an arm
for emphasis) You are Poseidon,
King of the sea, like you once
told Mr. Mercer and me.</i>
I am getting terrible at forgetting
things, but there is something
despite that, which I have not
forgotten.

Old Salt · May 11, 2008

Okay, Mercer, I edited some of the lines (in bold italics) but all the Jackspeak you added and Mercer's enhanced lines are here. If everyone likes this version we can go with it. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :yes

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INT. CAPTAINS CABIN, WICKED WENCH - DAY

JACK IS SEEN STANDING WITH HIS BACK TO THE DOOR, LOOKING OUT
THE STERN WINDOWS. FOOTSTEPS ARE HEARD AND JACK TURNS HIS
HEAD SLIGHTLY TOWARDS THE DOOR, THE DOOR IS OPENED QUICKLY
AS MERCER ENTERS.

MERCER
(COLDLY)
Mr. Sparrow, are we running late?
AGAIN?!

JACK
Of course not! CAPTAIN Jack
Sparrow is always due where he is
prompt! Er, prompt where he is
due. Ahem...

19.

MERCER
Oh, well we were PROMPTLY due at
Turtle Rock several days ago if my
Lord Becketts calculations are
correct.

JACK
(TURNING HEAD
TOWARDS MERCER)
Well, your 'lord' knows nothing of
sailing a ship then, does he?
Navigation, or the act of moving
one self from point 'a' to point
'b' is not an exact science. There
is a multitude of variables that
can delay one. Wind, currents,
weather conditions, ABSENCE OF
RUM.

MERCER
(BECOMING SWIFTLY
IRRITATED)
Really now? Then I suggest you
change that!

<b><i>JACK
(CHEERFULLY)
Right! I'll get the rum. </i></b>

MERCER
(BRINGS OUT HIS
PISTOL, HE IS
ANGERED, BUT
REMAINS CALM)
Mr. Sparrow, would you like to be
shot?

JACK
(SMILES WEAKLY)
I'd rather get the rum.

MERCER
(COCKS PISTOL)

<b><i>JACK
(HOLDS UP HIS
FINGER)
Right then, I'll summon some
land for you straight away.</i></b>

20.

SAILOR
(ENTERS THE CABIN
SWIFTLY)
Cap'n, we have reached land!

MERCER
(GIVES JACK A
STERN LOOK)

JACK
(SMILES)
King of the sea, mate. Its a gift.

MERCER
(HOLSTERS GUN)
I hope you never lose it, your
highness.

EXT. WICKED WENCH, MAIN DECK - DAY

JACK AND MERCER WALK ONTO THE DECK. EDWARDS IS LOOKING
THROUGH A SPYGLASS, JACK ALSO DOES THIS.

JACK
(HANDS SPYGLASS TO
MERCER)
There's your Turtle Rock.

MERCER GIVES JACK A COLD LOOK, HE IS CLEARLY DISAPPOINTED.

JACK
Quite impressive, Mr. Edwards,
impeccable timing.
(TO THE SAILORS)
All hands prepare the boats for
landing!

FADE OUT.

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morgan terror · May 11, 2008

'we have reached land' doesn't seem like something a sailor would say, to me. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" /> more something like 'we've arrived, sir' or 'we're there, captain'. however, i do see the point in 'land' being mentioned in the sentence.

Pieter Boelen · May 11, 2008

Some slight comments on Mercer's rewrite of the scene:
- I don't think Beckett would've made any calculations, since he probably doesn't know how to. And a person who <i>would</i> know how to, would probably also know that there's some measure of uncertainty involved. So I prefer the original "We should have come upon Turtle Rock several days ago! Beckett told me we'd be there on the 15th!" there. That suggests Beckett just made a guess and said that to Mercer.
- Navigation is not the simple act of moving one self from point a to point b. Navigation is doing this in the quickest and SAFEST way possible. Anyway, I don't think Jack needs to explain what navigation is. It makes Jack sound <i>really</i> quite annoyed.
- "Then I suggest you change that!": I think that "You'd better do something about that!" sounds somewhat better. It's more like a threat/order that way.
- We had changed that "Cap'n, we have reached land!" into "Capt'n! We have reached our destination". Actually, we might improve that further by changing it into something like "Captain, Mr Edwards' respects and we have reached our destination".

Old Salt · May 13, 2008

<i>Okay, here is the scene with the changes back in.</i>

INT. CAPTAINS CABIN, WICKED WENCH - DAY

JACK IS SEEN STANDING WITH HIS BACK TO THE DOOR, LOOKING OUT
THE STERN WINDOWS. FOOTSTEPS ARE HEARD AND JACK TURNS HIS
HEAD SLIGHTLY TOWARDS THE DOOR, THE DOOR IS OPENED QUICKLY
AS MERCER ENTERS.

MERCER
(COLDLY)
Mr. Sparrow, are we running late?
AGAIN?!

JACK
Of course not! CAPTAIN Jack
Sparrow is always due where he is
prompt! Er, prompt where he is
due. Ahem...

19.

MERCER
We should have come upon
Turtle Rock several days ago!
Beckett told me we'd be there
on the 15th!

JACK
(TURNING HEAD
TOWARDS MERCER)
Well, your 'lord' knows nothing of
sailing a ship then, does he?
Navigation, or the act of moving
one self from point 'a' to point
'b' is not an exact science. There
is a multitude of variables that
can delay one. Wind, currents,
weather conditions, ABSENCE OF
RUM.

MERCER
(BECOMING SWIFTLY
IRRITATED)
You'd better do something about that!

JACK
(CHEERFULLY)
Right! I'll get the rum.

MERCER
(BRINGS OUT HIS
PISTOL, HE IS
ANGERED, BUT
REMAINS CALM)
Mr. Sparrow, would you like to be
shot?

JACK
(SMILES WEAKLY)
I'd rather get the rum.

MERCER
(COCKS PISTOL)

JACK
(HOLDS UP HIS
FINGER)
Right then, I'll summon some
land for you straight away.

20.

SAILOR
(ENTERS THE CABIN
SWIFTLY)
Captain, Mr Edwards' respects
and we have reached our
destination.

MERCER
(GIVES JACK A
STERN LOOK)

JACK
(SMILES)
King of the sea, mate. Its a gift.

MERCER
(HOLSTERS GUN)
I hope you never lose it, your
highness.

EXT. WICKED WENCH, MAIN DECK - DAY

JACK AND MERCER WALK ONTO THE DECK. EDWARDS IS LOOKING
THROUGH A SPYGLASS, JACK ALSO DOES THIS.

JACK
(HANDS SPYGLASS TO
MERCER)
There's your Turtle Rock.

MERCER GIVES JACK A COLD LOOK, HE IS CLEARLY DISAPPOINTED.

JACK
Quite impressive, Mr. Edwards,
impeccable timing.
(TO THE SAILORS)
All hands prepare the boats for
landing!

FADE OUT.

Pieter Boelen · May 13, 2008

I take it you agree with my comments then? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />
Personally I'd change also "You'd better do something about that!" into "You'd better do something about that, then!"

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ May 11 2008, 02:09 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256188"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'>- Navigation is not the simple act of moving one self from point a to point b. Navigation is doing this in the quickest and SAFEST way possible. Anyway, I don't think Jack needs to explain what navigation is. It makes Jack sound <i>really</i> quite annoyed.</div>Did you miss this one or don't you agree with it?

Old Salt · May 14, 2008

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ May 13 2008, 01:51 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256798"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'>I take it you agree with my comments then? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" /></div>
Yes I do, since I included them. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :yes

" border="0" alt="yes.gif" /> Of course, I'd also like to hear others make their input, which is why I waited a few days before putting them into the scene. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ May 13 2008, 01:51 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256798"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'>Personally I'd change also "You'd better do something about that!" into "You'd better do something about that, then!"</div>
We could do that. To tell you the truth, as I stated earlier after Mercer posted this scene with his added dialogue, I liked the Jackspeak (the few issues I had with what he wrote I stated already in previous posts) he put in but I also liked the scene the way we had it so I thought a marriage of our two versions would work, much the way you married our two different versions of the scene earlier. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :yes

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<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ May 13 2008, 01:51 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256798"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ May 11 2008, 02:09 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256188"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'>- Navigation is not the simple act of moving one self from point a to point b. Navigation is doing this in the quickest and SAFEST way possible. Anyway, I don't think Jack needs to explain what navigation is. It makes Jack sound <i>really</i> quite annoyed.</div>Did you miss this one or don't you agree with it?
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Sorry I didn't comment on this one, I must have forgotten about it after putting in the other dialogue. I can see your point here, Pieter, but I'm also picturing Jack saying this in his Jackspeak as a way of defending himself against Mercer's accusation and I don't get the sense that he would come off as being overly annoyed. However I do think it may water down the punchline a bit due to the length of the dialogue and that when he finally gets to saying: <i><b>There
is a multitude of variables that can delay one. Wind, currents, weather conditions, ABSENCE OF RUM.</b></i> that it might not be as humorous as it might have been had he said it quicker. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />

Pieter Boelen · May 14, 2008

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Old Salt @ May 14 2008, 03:33 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256901"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'>To tell you the truth, as I stated earlier after Mercer posted this scene with his added dialogue, I liked the Jackspeak (the few issues I had with what he wrote I stated already in previous posts) he put in but I also liked the scene the way we had it so I thought a marriage of our two versions would work, much the way you married our two different versions of the scene earlier. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :yes

" border="0" alt="yes.gif" /></div>I do like Jack-speak in general, but I think sometimes we should refrain from it. It becomes tired after a while, doesn't it? I don't really like this particular piece of Jack-speak, mainly also because the definiton Jack gives of navigation is not a good one at all.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Old Salt @ May 14 2008, 03:33 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256901"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'>However I do think it may water down the punchline a bit due to the length of the dialogue and that when he finally gets to saying: <i><b>There is a multitude of variables that can delay one. Wind, currents, weather conditions, ABSENCE OF RUM.</b></i> that it might not be as humorous as it might have been had he said it quicker. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" /></div>I agree with that one. Also this sentence was originally meant as a direct homage to Raiders of the Lost Ark where Belloq says "archeology is not an exact science". I think such a reference would be appropriate because there's also plenty of RotLA references in CotBP, such as Elizabeth hiding the knife during the dinner scene the same way that Marion did in RotLA.

Old Salt · May 14, 2008

I remembered the Belloq reference but forgot about how Elizabeth's holding the knife alluded to Marion in RotLA. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

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I agree with you on the Jackspeak, and of course too much of anything is not good, but some of it is damn funny. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

:" border="0" alt="laugh.gif" /> How about this?

JACK
(TURNING HEAD
TOWARDS MERCER)
Well, your 'lord' knows nothing of
sailing a ship then, does he?
There are a multitude of variables that
can delay one. Wind, currents,
weather conditions, ABSENCE OF
RUM.

Pieter Boelen · May 14, 2008

That's pretty much what it was originally, isn't it? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

" border="0" alt="wink.gif" /><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE </div><div class='quotemain'>JACK
(turning to face Mercer)
Well, Beckett doesn't know much about sailing a ship then, does he? Navigation is not an exact science.
There's plenty of variables that can delay one. Wind, current, weather conditions, absence of rum.</div>Anyway; sounds fine to me. "Multitude" instead of "plenty" does sound more Jack-like. And "Your Lord" instead of "Beckett" would also work, I think. Especially the fact that Jack calls Beckett "<i>Your</i> Lord" suggests that Jack doesn't entirely consider Beckett to be his superior anymore. However, this might again make Mercer more suspicious. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/wacko.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":wacko:" border="0" alt="wacko.gif" />

Old Salt · May 15, 2008

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ May 14 2008, 01:24 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256962"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'>That's pretty much what it was originally, isn't it?</div>
Well, we've come full circle then right? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

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<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ May 14 2008, 01:24 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=256962"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'>Anyway; sounds fine to me. "Multitude" instead of "plenty" does sound more Jack-like. And "Your Lord" instead of "Beckett" would also work, I think. Especially the fact that Jack calls Beckett "<i>Your</i> Lord" suggests that Jack doesn't entirely consider Beckett to be his superior anymore. However, this might again make Mercer more suspicious. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/wacko.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":wacko:" border="0" alt="wacko.gif" /></div>
I think it is important that Jack starts to distance himself from Beckett's authority, at least in his own mind, and that it crops up in his speech. That can be a steady pattern that will rise to a crescendo in later scenes. Mercer is suspicious already but he doesn't quite catch on about Jack's intentions until its too late. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :yes

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Pieter Boelen · May 15, 2008

Very much agreed. So "Your Lord" is quite fine by me. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/doff.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :doff

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morgan terror · May 15, 2008

how about 'yer lord'? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :cheeky

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Pieter Boelen · May 15, 2008

It has to be <i>somewhat</i> respectful, doesn't it? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/rolleyes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :rolleyes:

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morgan terror · May 15, 2008

just in me piratey mood, nevermind. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

:" border="0" alt="laugh.gif" /> must be that excessive amount of ARGH's throughout the week.

Old Salt · May 16, 2008

Okay, so I guess we'll go with that then. I do like that the punchline comes rather quickly and the "your lord" reference is a bold statement by Jack that he is preparing to go his own way. I would like to move on to the next scene but don't want to lose these changes by having these posts become buried in the thread. Should we put it in the script now before we move on?

DAS123 · May 16, 2008

Sorry all, RL has been gripping me by the you-know-whats. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

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Well, Pieter made a good point, we need to not use Jack-speak so much or it gets tiring and annoying, we shouldnt use it at all int the jungle scene. Thats my opinion...

Old Salt · May 16, 2008

I agree that Jack-speak, if its used to much, can get tiring. But what Jack-speak are we speaking of? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :cheeky

" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" /> We have to remember that that is the way Jack speaks. That's the vocabulary he uses. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :yes

" border="0" alt="yes.gif" /> I guess we can tone down the degree to which he speaks it, but it is part of his character and can't be omitted completely in certain scenes. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />

BTW, Mercer, if your okay with the changes can you enter them in when you get a chance? They are in the posts on the top of this page plus that one dialogue of Jack's where he references the "absence of rum." <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :cheeky

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DAS123 · May 23, 2008

Well, I just think it gets a little annoying. We need some different dialogue to change the tone for a bit, then go back to it. Thats all. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

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Thoughts anyone?

Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

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