Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

morgan terror · Nov 30, 2007

then i'd recommend you'd read my story i showed to the commodore earlier. although him being quite useless in the beginning, i've given him his own special character for when he's with me in the game. in fact, i do so with all my officers. it makes the game a whole lot more fun. anyway, i understand if you can't see that or look at it differently, but this is how i've always seen it.

Pieter Boelen · Nov 30, 2007

What post is that in? Do you have a link?

DAS123 · Dec 1, 2007

Can't we contact the scriptwriters, Ted and that other guy? See if they could get Disney to recognize this as a possible idea for the future movie? If not well, we have got a lot of junk to get through.

morgan terror · Dec 1, 2007

hey, i'm sure i posted here earlier. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" /> damnit, it dissapeared, and it was a lot of writing. anyway, here's the link again:

<a href="http://www.forum.thelib.com/index.php?topic=3729.0" target="_blank">http://www.forum.thelib.com/index.php?topic=3729.0</a>

it takes a while before i start the character development, and there's a few plotholes, but it's a nice read anyway. Artois doesn't really seem to like Tortuga a lot though, which wouldn't make him such a good pirate. more of a rogue buccaneer. *pling!* *lightbulb appears*

Pieter Boelen · Dec 1, 2007

Are there any thoughts on the ideas I posted a couple of posts before? I had expected at least some comments by now. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Dec 1 2007, 02:36 PM) [snapback]223955[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>Can't we contact the scriptwriters, Ted and that other guy? See if they could get Disney to recognize this as a possible idea for the future movie? If not well, we have got a lot of junk to get through.</div>I was just thinking: They indeed seem to be the most approachable people I know. They've got their website www.wordplayer.com and they are known to occasionally post on the keeptothecode.com forum. I also once sent an e-mail to the WordPlayer webmaster because I couldn't load the site and did get a reply and my access to the site was also fixed. So we might be able to post something on the WordPlayer forum or send an e-mail to the webmaster of the site. Might be worth and try and would probably be our best chance. Might be better to wait with that until we've actually finished the script though. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/rolleyes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :rolleyes:

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<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Morgan Terror @ Dec 1 2007, 03:24 PM) [snapback]223959[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>hey, i'm sure i posted here earlier. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" /> damnit, it dissapeared, and it was a lot of writing. anyway, here's the link again:
<a href="http://www.forum.thelib.com/index.php?topic=3729.0" target="_blank">http://www.forum.thelib.com/index.php?topic=3729.0</a></div>Holy crap! That's a LOT to read through. Not sure when I'll have the chance to get through all that. Any chance of a summary? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/whistling.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :wp

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morgan terror · Dec 2, 2007

well, that would still be a big one, but i think my discription of Artois on the previous page pretty much sums it up. my previous post here is of course part of it.

gunsmith · Dec 3, 2007

Ahoy mateys!

Pieter...what I meant earlyer about script...look at the script for PotC1 and PotC2...they have a lot of description, we dont. But that can be fixed latter.

Now about that night conversation... I like it a lot. i will soon (today or tomorow) update what I would change.
This part is perfect:

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>NATHANIEL
Ah, the sea; always changing,
never contained.

JACK
That, my friend is the definition
of freedom. I am a man of the
sea...of freedom.</div>
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And this one I dont get:
<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>NATHANIEL
Hmh. You long to be free, as do I,
we are all pawns in the greater
chess game.</div>

Pawns and freedom?
Dont get it.

Pieter - Why would he put Nath in comand of navigation? Altough it would be cool. And the scene at night when Edwards is looking the stars to navigate is cool too.
<i>Arival at Africa</i> idea is cool too but we could go without it.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>I ended up changing more than I had originally intended. Sorry about that.</div>

-thats a good thing.

And I like the Franch pirate idea too.
Altough it sounds funny to join up with someone you were just trying to kill...or I'm wrong.

Pieter Boelen · Dec 3, 2007

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(gunsmith @ Dec 3 2007, 10:19 AM) [snapback]224160[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>This part is perfect:<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>NATHANIEL
Ah, the sea; always changing,
never contained.

JACK
That, my friend is the definition
of freedom. I am a man of the
sea...of freedom.</div></div>I don't like that Jack suddenly says "I am a man of the sea... of freedom". I can't see Jack just suddenly saying that. That's why I removed that line and added "You seem to care much for your freedom". To this Jack could then reply "I am a man of the sea... of freedom". Makes a bit more sense to me.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(gunsmith @ Dec 3 2007, 10:19 AM) [snapback]224160[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>And this one I dont get:
<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>NATHANIEL
Hmh. You long to be free, as do I,
we are all pawns in the greater
chess game.</div>
Pawns and freedom?
Dont get it.</div>Most people can be considered pawns because they have to do what "the big ones" say. Cutler Beckett in this case. Both Jack and Nathaniel work for Beckett and are thus not free. Instead Edwards thinks they're pawns and don't have any choice. Jack, on the other hand, claims he is a <i>knight</i>, suggesting that he is not merely a pawn, but does have his fate in his own hands. I like it. I'd just change "You long to be free, as do I" into "You long to be free, as do we all". It strikes me as an odd thing to say otherwise. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(gunsmith @ Dec 3 2007, 10:19 AM) [snapback]224160[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>And this one I dont get

ieter - Why would he put Nath in comand of navigation? Altough it would be cool. And the scene at night when Edwards is looking the stars to navigate is cool too.</div>Perhaps because Jack isn't particularly good at it? See Dead Man's Chest. Particularly with his rum-drinking habits. He doesn't want to screw up on this voyage, so he prefers not to make any accidental detours. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :cheeky

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Another option is that he wants Edwards to prove himself; to see how good he is. And he does need to give Edwards SOMETHING to do. Jack is officially just a captain, Edwards is a Post-Captain, which is officially a higher rank than Jack. So Jack couldn't give Edwards a completely unimportant job. Navigating the ship would be pretty important. Also if Edwards is in charge of navigation, Mercer can't blame Jack if the voyage takes longer than expected.
I also like the idea of seeing Edwards working with his sextant. That adds a bit more interest to a scene that would otherwise just be talking. It also adds some realism and a sense of what things actually need to be done on a ship.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(gunsmith @ Dec 3 2007, 10:19 AM) [snapback]224160[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><i>Arival at Africa</i> idea is cool too but we could go without it.</div>True; it doesn't really add all that much to the story. I like it though because again it shows how ships were sailed in these days: it adds a sense of historical realism. And it does show Edwards being a very capable officer and would be a reason for Jack to respect him. After all: Edwards and Jack need to respect each other and be friendly to each other, so we must come up with reasons why Edwards respects Jack and why Jack respects Edwards.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(gunsmith @ Dec 3 2007, 10:19 AM) [snapback]224160[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>And I like the Franch pirate idea too.
Altough it sounds funny to join up with someone you were just trying to kill...or I'm wrong.</div>They were sailing under the EITC colours, so the French pirate came in to try and steal their cargo. However, the French pirate finds a more worthy and unconventional adversary than he had expected. He knows he can't win, so he surrenders. But he doesn't want to lose completely, so offers Jack to be his partner in a profitable venture. Jack being Jack is tempted by this offer and eventually agrees.

gunsmith · Dec 3, 2007

Well that is perfect too. This freedom speach. You know.....
<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>Ah, the sea; always changing,
never contained.............That, my friend, is the definition
of freedom.</div>

That part is perfect.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>Hmh. You long to be free, as do I<b>.</b>
<b>We</b> are all pawns in the greater
chess game.</div>

Oh I get it now. But there should be a little pause in speach before he says <i>We are all.....</i>
I thought that too but this comma was confusing me.

Another thing....I am for Pieters idea that Edwards is the navigator. I just can't get this scene out of my head with him and sextant.
If we are all for the <i>Arival at Africa idea</i> we can add a little dialouge there too. When they call Land Ho! we can toss in a little dialouge between Jack and Edwards about his navigation and about Africa.

Pieter Boelen · Dec 3, 2007

I agree. There should be a dot instead of a comma. Please check my rewritten version of that scene. I had changed it in there. I made it "But we are all pawns in the greater chess game".

I think when they'd arrive at Africa, Jack would order the ship to sail around along the coast to determine where they are exactly. Once he found out they are where they should be, Jack compliments Edwards on his navigatory skills, then they make ready to go ashore. This doesn't need to take very long. A minute; two at most. It's just a bit of nice added realism and a fun character scene.

gunsmith · Dec 3, 2007

And what about Disney thing?

Are we even allowed to write this?
(intelectual property)
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Old Salt · Dec 3, 2007

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(gunsmith @ Dec 3 2007, 09:09 AM) [snapback]224201[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>And what about Disney thing?

Are we even allowed to write this?
(intelectual property)
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Of course, because were going to send it to Disney anyway.

Old Salt · Dec 3, 2007

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Pieter Boelen @ Dec 1 2007, 06:13 PM) [snapback]224041[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>Are there any thoughts on the ideas I posted a couple of posts before? I had expected at least some comments by now. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" /></div>
I've been pretty busy lately and there is a lot of posts to go through. I'll try to comment on your ideas soon, Pieter.

Pieter Boelen · Dec 3, 2007

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(gunsmith @ Dec 3 2007, 03:09 PM) [snapback]224201[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'>And what about Disney thing?
Are we even allowed to write this?
(intelectual property)</div>There's plenty of PotC fanfiction around. Nobody made a problem of that. I can picture them complaining when we'd try and make a profit out if it though. But I don't WANT to make a profit from it. I want THEM to make a profit from it! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :cheeky

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Pieter Boelen · Dec 3, 2007

I found a <a href="http://rogerebert.suntimes.com/apps/pbcs.dll/article?AID=/19951222/REVIEWS/512220302/1023" target="_blank">funny review of Cutthroat Island</a>, with a couple of things any pirate movie should have:<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>(1) an escape from a hostile port
(2) a battle at sea, preferably with broadsides fired and pirates boarding each other's ships
(3) one featured swordfight
(4) a storm at sea, with the survivors washed ashore
(5) discovery of the treasure and a final confrontation

It touches all of these bases like clockwork, not even overlooking the convention that no matter how fierce and deadly the storm at sea, the survivors all regain consciousness after washing up on a beach that is required to (a) look like a postcard from Maui and (b) belong to the very island they were trying to find.</div>So did we miss anything in our script? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/whistling.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=" :wp

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DAS123 · Dec 3, 2007

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>I found a <a href="http://rogerebert.suntimes.com/apps/pbcs.dll/article?AID=/19951222/REVIEWS/512220302/1023" target="_blank">funny review of Cutthroat Island</a>, with a couple of things any pirate movie should have:
(2) a battle at sea, preferably with broadsides fired and pirates boarding each other's ships
(3) one featured swordfight
(4) a storm at sea, with the survivors washed ashore
(5) discovery of the treasure and a final confrontation</div>
I think we have covered the sea-battle, but i might have a new twist to add to it i will post it a bit down this post. We have many ideas of the sword fights.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>(4) a storm at sea, with the survivors washed ashore</div>
I dont like the survivor thing, but the storm can happen.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>(1) an escape from a hostile port</div>
I like this idea, its a good idea, so lets roll with it.

Okay, about the twist, why dont we have a few other renown pirates, Teague, Ching, Capitane Chevalle, and a few others help the Pearl escape? They might see the Dutchman attempting to help her out of the fray, but it isnt going so well, because i agree the dutchman is not invincible, so she will be taking alot of damage holding the pearls hand out of the battle. Maybe Edwards can help with the Phalanx idea from the Commodore, his ship's magazine explodes, and the Pearl is now in even more trouble. So now BBBAAAAMMM!!! Pirates come in bow chasers blazing, camera wheels quickly around to reveal this. Then they help the pearl out and we will go from there. Just a little twist i thought of Pieter, might like it with the boarding idea.

Thanks for all the rewrites, all must know i am only one person, so sorry for all the mis wording, but i can only do so much, thats why i rely on you guys to filter through it, and add to it with your own lines, and <i>I</i> will filter <i>yours</i>. Again, i am trying to keep to the add tidbits during the week, write a bunch on Saturday, and sunday, and then post it on Sunday evening.

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'>NATHANIEL
Ah, the sea; always changing,
never contained.

JACK
That, my friend is the definition
of freedom. I am a man of the
sea...of freedom.</div>

I am glad everyone liked it, i just thought to my self at that point "We need one of those memorable lines that can go in those special TV trailers," and so i put that in. I just saw the opportunity to do that and i went with it.

And just something i heard, i really like this quote, it is inspiring:

A philosopher once said:
When faced with innumerable alternatives, consider your imperative.

I just thought i would share that, maybe we could work it in some-time.

PS. Keep up the good editing work, that's what makes all the errors vanish when we have 5,6,even 7 people read over it, and correct different mistakes and fluency problems. All i do is lay the ground work, you guys (and me occasionally acting on someone elses idea) need to embellish it, and build on it. Ted and Terry are only two, and if they both have the same ideas the script is kind of...blah. But with many people we have many different points of view and different types of ideas that can really make this a blast.

DAS123 · Dec 3, 2007

I will be updating the script tomorrow evening so please everyone try to get all objections answered, and any problems with my version sorted. Then we can move on, to the STORM. Bum...bum....BUUUUUUM. LOL <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

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Old Salt · Dec 4, 2007

Look forward to reading it, I have to get back up to speed with the script.

gunsmith · Dec 4, 2007

When you say ''tomorow evening'' is that your tomorow evening or my tomorow evening? Coz now I have no idea wich tomorow evening are talking about? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile2.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="

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Guys I wrote something about that describing earlyer. We haven't got a lot of describing. Look at those scripts of PotC 1 i 2. Or we are gonna do that later..... like.....after the 1/4 of script or even more later?

gunsmith · Dec 4, 2007

INT. WICKED WENCH, JACKS OFFICE - DAY

Jack is staniding in his office and looking throughout the windows.
Footsteps are heard. Jack turns his head slightly towards doors.
Mercer opens the door and enters.
Jack turns towards doors.

<div align="center">MERCER
(angry)
Mr. Sparrow... Are we running late? Again ?!</div>

<div align="center">JACK
...Of course not. CAPTAIN Jack Sparrow is never late.</div>

<div align="center">MERCER
Oh really? We should have been on land two days ago!
(pionting at him)
You better do something about that or (grabs his pistol)....</div>

Heard form the deck

<div align="center">SAILOR
Land ho!!!</div>

Jack smiles at Mercer.

EXT. WICKED WENCH, MAIN DECK

Jack and Mercer walking out of Jack's office.
We see some sailors passing by them as they
walk towards Edwards who is looking through the spyglass.
Jack grabs his own spyglass and looks.

<div align="center">JACK
(to Mercer)
Theres your land.
(Yells to sailors)
........................</div>

Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

Magnificent bastard

Navigation Officer

Fleet Admiral

Magnificent bastard

Navigation Officer

Magnificent bastard

Landlubber

Navigation Officer

Landlubber

Navigation Officer

Landlubber

Asylum escapee

Asylum escapee

Navigation Officer

Navigation Officer

Fleet Admiral

Fleet Admiral

Asylum escapee

Landlubber

Landlubber