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Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

<img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/modding.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":modding" border="0" alt="modding.gif" /> <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/boom.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":boom" border="0" alt="boom.gif" /> I AM GOING TO KILL THIS DAMN WEBSITE! It STILL wont let me put the picture on EVEN THOUGH i am attempting to upload it from photobucket, due to a "no dynamic pages allowed" or some crap. I am getting very POed about this.
 
I did read about the wind issue! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" /> Good stuff there.

About my gunflashes, lightning, etc:
I lightly outline the "flash" of the gun and leave it completely white, then after I scan it, I play with it in The Gimp]/b]. I smooth the image with "Van Gogh Effect" to get rid of the pixelated look of the scan, play with the sharpness, tint, shade, saturation until I get the colors or shading to look right, then I use a "Supernova Effect" with its vertex on the unshaded gunflash outline. For the lightning, I selected the color white, which was just the interior of the bolt (as the rest of the image was a shadr of green) and used the "Softglow Effect".

My opening scenes are comming along nicely. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile2.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":))" border="0" alt="smile2.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=214817:date=Sep 19 2007, 05:05 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 19 2007, 05:05 PM) [snapback]214817[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec--><img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/modding.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":modding" border="0" alt="modding.gif" /> <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/boom.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":boom" border="0" alt="boom.gif" /> I AM GOING TO KILL THIS DAMN WEBSITE! It STILL wont let me put the picture on EVEN THOUGH i am attempting to upload it from photobucket, due to a "no dynamic pages allowed" or some crap. I am getting very POed about this.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Okay, Mercer, if you downloaded it to photobucket all you have to do then is find the picture of what you downloaded, there are four choices underneath the picture:

<b>Email & IM
Direct Link
HTML Tag
IMG Code </b>

Click on the second choice "Direct Link" and it should copy to your clipboard and then you just come back to PA and paste it into your sig and you should have the image in there then. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
Just as an observation, wouldn't it be interesting to see who would have won a fight between the Black Pearle and the Dutchman when the Black Pearl and its crew were cursed and thus couldn't be destroyed and its crewmembers couldn't be killed. How come the two ships never met up anywhere in the ten years that Barobssa was captain and cursed?
As Barbossa said to Jack while they were swordfighting at the end of first film. <i>So what now, Jack Sparrow? Are we to be two immortals, locked in epic battle until the trumpets of Judgement Day?</i> Since neither Jones nor Barbossa and his crew at that point couldn't die, it would be a stalemate.
 
<!--quoteo(post=214766:date=Sep 19 2007, 01:00 PM:name=morgan terror)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(morgan terror @ Sep 19 2007, 01:00 PM) [snapback]214766[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->commodore, how do you make the highlighted things, like lightning and cannon flashes? i never managed to make such things. they always end up slightly ragged (too obvious outlines, or it being too obvious that i deliberatly didn't draw anything there) or smudged. i'll put something made by myself up. it's not that good, as i'm really new at drawing people, but still.

here it is:

this pic is actually made as an illustration for a story at ellaybe island, which would explain certain oddities you might see. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="icon_wink.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Pretty good, Morgan. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=214816:date=Sep 19 2007, 04:54 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 19 2007, 04:54 PM) [snapback]214816[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Of course you know that i will be commenting on scene 19. Very good, i like it, we have laid all our cards an the table, now were selecting the prize. Are we going with my plan for the battle? Of course with your ship names Commodore. I like the idea of the pearl going one on one with norton, lets have him on the Amber along with Mercer in the intercepted fleet of eight ships to close the circle on the two ships. The Amber was de-masted in my draft of the battle, and Norton can be killed from a falling mast or splintering wood what ever you want.

That thing you said about the conflict between the EITC and the VOC would be nice, that would give Beckett reason to sail from England to protect his assets. He will go in style with most of his fleet at the time. After his fleet was destroyed by Jones, this does two things first it gives beckett the reason to seek Jones heart in DMC, also he will rebuild a larger fleet and sail against the VOC and other Dutch owned East India companies, thus aquiring his vast fleet of 300 ships that we will see in DMC. I like that Mercer would be given a larger role in this, i think he deserves to frighten the audience.

<img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/hi.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":gday" border="0" alt="hi.gif" /> <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/william.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":will" border="0" alt="william.gif" /> Commodore have you read my plan on the Wind problem for the battle?<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
I like it as well. A few questions though. Should we open on land or would it be better to open up with scene 3 then going back to 1? Picture the movie opening with a sail in the distance and the camera panning over the water and moving up on it fast and then panning around the ship till we see what looks to be Jack Sparrow at the helm. Then quickly go to English countryside and follow through with Scene 2 and then skip to scene 4 and now show the Wench sailing up the Thames.
Just a thought.

We will have to expand on how Jack decided to turn to piracy but I like the premise. Does he have a long talk with Tia, is he in conflict even before he gets to the Ivory Coast? Does he relay this to Norton?

I like the Nassau angle, kind of has the legendary sacking of Nassau without firing a shot sneak up on you. The audience won't be thinking that this is actually the event taking place until its over.

I played with that idea also, having the last scene be of Hector Barbossa, maybe stepping out of the shadows and issuing a greeting to Jack.
 
<!--quoteo(post=214834:date=Sep 19 2007, 06:55 PM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 19 2007, 06:55 PM) [snapback]214834[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I like it as well. A few questions though. Should we open on land or would it be better to open up with scene 3 then going back to 1? Picture the movie opening with a sail in the distance and the camera panning over the water and moving up on it fast and then panning around the ship till we see what looks to be Jack Sparrow at the helm. Then quickly go to English countryside and follow through with Scene 2 and then skip to scene 4 and now show the Wench sailing up the Thames.
Just a thought.

We will have to expand on how Jack decided to turn to piracy but I like the premise. Does he have a long talk with Tia, is he in conflict even before he gets to the Ivory Coast? Does he relay this to Norton?

I like the Nassau angle, kind of has the legendary sacking of Nassau without firing a shot sneak up on you. The audience won't be thinking that this is actually the event taking place until its over.

I played with that idea also, having the last scene be of Hector Barbossa, maybe stepping out of the shadows and issuing a greeting to Jack.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Guys, i think we should show how they became cursed, and why bootstrap went to serve on the dutchman. That would be interesting. To show these "sea turtles" they talk so much about. Just a thought, always wondered how that all went down.

<img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/william.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":will" border="0" alt="william.gif" /> So are we all in agreement on my sea battle plan?
 
<!--quoteo(post=214705:date=Sep 18 2007, 04:49 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Pieter Boelen @ Sep 18 2007, 04:49 PM) [snapback]214705[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Could anyone come up with an explanation why Bootstrap Bill detoriated so quickly? In DMC he was pretty much allright, seeming to be less influenced by the curse than the other crewmembers, yet in AWE he was already almost in Wyvern-state whilst the other crewmembers were mostly still the same as in DMC. What happened? If we can figure out why Bootstrap detoriated so quickly, perhaps we can use similar reasoning to find out how quickly Davy Jones did or did not become squid-like. In any case: It is a bit of a mystery. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/dunno.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":shrug" border="0" alt="dunno.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Sorry, Pieter, I had meant to respond to this yesterday. I guess there can be several different reasons. First, maybe since Bootstrap lost at liars dice to Jones to try to save Will, since as a consequence of losing the game he now has to endure eternal servitude, his condition started to accelerate. Or perhaps his grief in believing that Will was killed had something to do with speeding up the process. Davy Jones, on the other hand, broke his deal and so his condition may have visited him quite suddenly.
 
<!--quoteo(post=214837:date=Sep 19 2007, 09:37 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 19 2007, 09:37 PM) [snapback]214837[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Guys, i think we should show how they became cursed, and why bootstrap went to serve on the dutchman. That would be interesting. To show these "sea turtles" they talk so much about. Just a thought, always wondered how that all went down.

<img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/william.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":will" border="0" alt="william.gif" /> So are we all in agreement on my sea battle plan?<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
We could do that, though we should address it a bit later after we get these other ideas sorted out that come about earlier in the script.

Mercer, I think your sea battle plan is a good framework upon which we can build as we come to see how it can be fit into the script and under what circumstances are finally agreed on that bring about the battle. All ideas this early on will probably be forever in a state of flux as the screenplay is drafted and starts to take on a coherent form, pending the hashing out of everyones ideas and opinions. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />

BTW, I see you got your sig straightened out. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=214840:date=Sep 19 2007, 11:28 PM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 19 2007, 11:28 PM) [snapback]214840[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->We could do that, though we should address it a bit later after we get these other ideas sorted out that come about earlier in the script.

Mercer, I think your sea battle plan is a good framework upon which we can build as we come to see how it can be fit into the script and under what circumstances are finally agreed on that bring about the battle. All ideas this early on will probably be forever in a state of flux as the screenplay is drafted and starts to take on a coherent form, pending the hashing out of everyones ideas and opinions. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />

BTW, I see you got your sig straightened out. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Yep. i modified it my self to get the caption "Hello Chum." on there.

I see what you are saying about the script and everything, and it is a good idea. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=214829:date=Sep 19 2007, 02:26 PM:name=Commodore John Paul Jones)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Commodore John Paul Jones @ Sep 19 2007, 02:26 PM) [snapback]214829[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I did read about the wind issue! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" /> Good stuff there.

About my gunflashes, lightning, etc:
I lightly outline the "flash" of the gun and leave it completely white, then after I scan it, I play with it in The Gimp]/b]. I smooth the image with "Van Gogh Effect" to get rid of the pixelated look of the scan, play with the sharpness, tint, shade, saturation until I get the colors or shading to look right, then I use a "Supernova Effect" with its vertex on the unshaded gunflash outline. For the lightning, I selected the color white, which was just the interior of the bolt (as the rest of the image was a shadr of green) and used the "Softglow Effect".

My opening scenes are comming along nicely. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile2.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":))" border="0" alt="smile2.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->

as i always do everything with nothing more than a pencil and an eraser, i'm afraid that i havn't the faintest clue what you're talking about. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/rolleyes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":rolleyes:" border="0" alt="rolleyes.gif" /> but nevermind. i'll figure out a way to improve my technique. most likely being practice, and lots of it.
 
<!--quoteo(post=214846:date=Sep 20 2007, 07:27 AM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 20 2007, 07:27 AM) [snapback]214846[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Yep. i modified it my self to get the caption "Hello Chum." on there.

I see what you are saying about the script and everything, and it is a good idea. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->"Hello Chum" was a nice touch. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />

I think we are making good progress, lots of ideas in the mix. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
Yep, good progress, good progress. I think we should show how the pirates became cursed, and why Bootstrap joined Davy Jones crew. That would be interesting. Jones must say to both Sparrow and Bootstrap "Do 'ya fear death?". But when Jones confronts Bootstrap we will not show his face since he is tenatcally, it'll be a surprise for DMC. All we need is to see Bootstrap breathing heavily and hear Jones say "Bill Turner, do you fear death?" That would be nice.
 
Hey, here is a drawing i did of my signature, sorry for the sucky quality, my copier isnt too good on pencil drawings. Also you will notice that he is not as cheeky as in the actual picture, thats what happens when you try to draw it from a flatscreen computer monitor. Still i am happy with it. I will also upload my drawing of Jack, and Barbossa from the AWE productioin photos, the one with him holding the smoking lanyard, and the cannon is sparking, and JAck the monkey is on his shoulder. I will get these up ASAP! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="icon_wink.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=214913:date=Sep 20 2007, 07:27 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 20 2007, 07:27 PM) [snapback]214913[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Yep, good progress, good progress. I think we should show how the pirates became cursed, and why Bootstrap joined Davy Jones crew. That would be interesting. Jones must say to both Sparrow and Bootstrap "Do 'ya fear death?". But when Jones confronts Bootstrap we will not show his face since he is tenatcally, it'll be a surprise for DMC. All we need is to see Bootstrap breathing heavily and hear Jones say "Bill Turner, do you fear death?" That would be nice.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
I think it would be interesting as well, but are we talking about a second prequel or do we bring this prequel we are working on up to the point where Jack rides up to the dock in Port Royale on his sinking boat?

It is interesting about Boostrap. According to the first film, Barbossa chained him to a cannonball and dropped him over the side in retaliation for Bootstrap sending the gold coin off to Will so that they couldn't break the curse. Bootstrap felt they deserved it for marooning Jack. But Bootstrap Bill couldn't die since he was cursed, so he would have been chained to the cannon ball on the ocean floor. Don't you think, being cursed, he could have found a way to escape the chains and find his way back up to the surface? I mean, why would he have needed Davy Jone's help? He wasn't dead. Just an observation.
 
<!--quoteo(post=214914:date=Sep 20 2007, 07:40 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 20 2007, 07:40 PM) [snapback]214914[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Hey, here is a drawing i did of my signature, sorry for the sucky quality, my copier isnt too good on pencil drawings. Also you will notice that he is not as cheeky as in the actual picture, thats what happens when you try to draw it from a flatscreen computer monitor. Still i am happy with it. I will also upload my drawing of Jack, and Barbossa from the AWE productioin photos, the one with him holding the smoking lanyard, and the cannon is sparking, and JAck the monkey is on his shoulder. I will get these up ASAP! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="icon_wink.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
You captured the dead expression Mercer is wearing in your drawing. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/thumbs1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":2up" border="0" alt="thumbs1.gif" /> Man, just looking into that face <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/pirate2.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":p:" border="0" alt="pirate2.gif" /> you know this guy wouldn't give a second's thought or a moments pause about shooting someone dead. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/guns.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":2guns" border="0" alt="guns.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=214916:date=Sep 20 2007, 07:13 PM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 20 2007, 07:13 PM) [snapback]214916[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->You captured the dead expression Mercer is wearing in your drawing. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/thumbs1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":2up" border="0" alt="thumbs1.gif" /> Man, just looking into that face <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/pirate2.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":p:" border="0" alt="pirate2.gif" /> you know this guy wouldn't give a second's thought or a moments pause about shooting someone dead. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/guns.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":2guns" border="0" alt="guns.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Thats why i like him, he scares the s#$% out of me! I went to GREAT lengths to capture that stone cold stare of his. Go back i think two or three pages to those links of the videos, and watch the Singapore battle one i posted there, thats the scene my signature comes from. Later on in the clip you will see a chinese chick's legs kicking from behind a crate saying "NO! NO! WAIT" and Mercer pulls out his pistol and shoots her without a moments pause, then grimmaces as he pulls out a steel chopstick she lodged deep above his heart. SCARY!!!
 
The green waters of the English Channel quietly rose and fell as a single gull screamed, falling from the sky to snatch a morsel of food then glide across the surface. The damp, gray coast of England could be seen as the dull thud of a bow cutting through waves could be heard. A ship labored up the channel under tops, gallants, and stays with the wind coming peacefully from the starboard quarter.
The ship, an older looking galleon with a single tier of gun ports, heeled to larboard ever so slightly with the grace of a fine sea bird, her long streaming pennant dancing from the mainmast’s peak and a large East India Company ensign billowing from the gaff-boom. Her hull was a flat black with a broad yellow stripe along the gun deck, actual gold paint on the gilt work, and a deep scarlet on the underside of the opened gun port lids. The sails were a weathered tan, the masts of natural wood with black fighting tops, caps, and yards. Her decks were a well sanded natural wood with well finished deck furniture; this vessel was a true work of art. The only odd aspect of the vessel was the stenciled name than ran along the width of the stern under the galleries in gold paint: <i>Wicked Wench</i>. The name hardly seemed to fit so fine looking a ship, one that obviously handled well and no doubt had a speed record of some sorts.
Upon the quarterdeck, an officer in a rather expensive looking civilian garb stood with one hand stretched out, a pocket watch resting open in his palm. He eyed the watch and snapped it shut, tucking it back into the pocket of his waistcoat then clasping his hands behind his back. The ribbon that tied back his powdered queue rippled in the wind as he turned to face away from the starboard rail and strode to the ship’s wheel where a small collection of other officers stood.
“Its half past ten Mr. Watts.” the officer said crisply, “Strike the bell and summon the captain.”
The officer named Watts nodded, “Aye Mr. Farquhar.”
The bell was sounded soon after and the ship stirred slightly, a few more hands coming topside from the waist to join those already on watch. A couple of marines in the dark EIC uniforms laughed as they jostled their shipmate awake, who had fallen asleep on watch by the hammock nettings.
Watts strode aft under the quarterdeck to the double doors that led to the great cabin. He entered quietly and observed the compartment in which the captain ran the ship. A large table was strewn with charts and navigational tools, a single glass of red wine from the previous night still sat on the table, half empty. A plain black cocked hat of the French style sat on the bench that ran under the stern windows next to a simple, yet ornately fine frock coat of brown tweed. Watts scuffed over to the door that led to the captain’s sleeping cabin and knocked on it.
A soft, smooth voice sounded from inside, “Yes?”
Watts cleared his throat, “Half past ten sir. Mr. Farquhar wished to see that you were awake.”
“I’ll be up presently.” the voice replied. The sound of boots scraping on the deck was heard as the captain moved about.
“Aye Captain.” Watts looked at the floor, then made back for the door. Once back out on the quarterdeck, he took his place by the wheel behind Farquhar, the executive officer aboard.
“Look Percy.” Farquhar addressed Watts, “’Bout four points off the larboard bow.”
Farquhar was holding a lens to his eye, the corner of his mouth revealing his teeth as he squinted one eye shut. Watts looked around and grabbed a lens from the rack behind the standing compass, opening it and looking to where Farquhar had nodded. In the lens he could make out the large shadows of several ships riding at anchor behind the headland.
“Spithead?” Watts asked.
“That it is Percy.” Farquhar said with a grin, “Almost home.”
“How many do you make out?” Watts asked, “I’ve counted at least six.”
Farquhar shook his head, “I see seven. See? There’s a frigate moored off to the North of the third seventy-four.”
Watts trained the lens to the right slightly, “Ah ha… there she is.” He lowered the lens, “Who’s squadron do you think it is?”
Farquhar snapped his lens shut and returned it to the rack, “I’m willing to bet its Admiral Rodney.” he said, “See the <i>Dublin</i>?”
Watts nodded, “Ah! But isn’t he Commodore?”
“No, no!” Farquhar grinned, “He was made -Rear-Admiral a year ago.”
“So what do we have here, gentlemen?” the quiet, yet commanding voice asked.
“The Channel squadron Sir…” Farquhar announced, “…Spithead.”
The captain nodded as he ascended the stairs to the quarterdeck, then slowly glided over to the standing compass. He checked the heading and spun on his heel, the coattails of his frock fanning out as he did so.
He wore the brown tweed coat over a fine gray waistcoat and breeches that matched the frock. These he tucked into a black pair of riding boots; his shirt was an off white, slightly damp and weathered looking from wearing it for a long period of time. His white neck stock matched the shirt and his dark brown hair was pulled neatly back into a queue, one rebellious strand running down his right temple to the bottom of his ear. His sideburns were neatly edged and his thin moustache trimmed to perfection; a hint of a goatee was starting to show under his bottom lip and on his chin.
“Well Mr. Farquhar, lets loose the courses and get a little closer inshore.” the captain said, “The Thames awaits us.”
The hands were called topside and began to scramble up the ratlines to inch out on the yards. It was a perilous thing, setting sails, but it was a natural and everyday occurrence in the life of a sailor. The canvas was lost and the courses bellied out with the wind as the corners of the boltrope were yanked back into control. The galleon began to pick up speed, the frothing bow wave becoming stronger and the wake more violent as the sails were secured. Next the wheel was put over a few spokes, slowly and easily swinging the rudder to larboard and nosing the bow towards the coast.
“Mr. Farquhar,” the captain said, “pipe all hands to breakfast. Then you may have them change into their best slops… the ladies <i>will</i> be watching…”
Farquhar grinned and doffed his hat, “Aye aye captain!”
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The shores of the Thames were dotted with spectators as the <i>Wicked Wench</i> gracefully cut through the murky waters towards the East India anchorage. Their destination was an inlet along the Northern bank of the great river; a small collection of docks, a slip, the necessary warehouses, and a large two story office building of white stone with large columns at the entrance. The office complex was crowned by a tall flag mast the bore the dark colors of the East India Company, accompanied by the Union Jack below it. In the anchorage lay three two decked East Indiamen and a large first rate of the EIC Armed Escort Fleet.
“Run out the leeward chaser.” the captain said quietly to Watts, “Fire a salute.”
Watts nodded and hurried forward to get the chaser’s gun crew at work. The piece was loaded with powder and run out, the gun captain ready with his linstock. Watts looked to the captain and held his arm up in preparation. The captain nodded and Watts cut down.
A sharp bang resounded around the area to great effect, the blue gray smoke rolling across the water as the wind procured it. Shortly afterward, a single thundering boom answered the approaching vessel from the first rate. The <i>Wicked Wench</i> drew near, not under topsails alone and the crew ready by the anchor. The Indiaman passed off the stern of the looming man-of-war, whose stern bore the name <i>Endeavor</i> in crisp yellow lettering.
“Heave to and launch the longboat presently.” the captain ordered, “Then you may haul back the gratings and rig the yardarms up as cranes. They’ll want our cargo soon, no doubt.”
The captain’s orders proved to be correct as several large bares began to row out to the vessel, obviously ready to collect the contents of their hold. The captain stood nonchalantly on the quarterdeck, observing the EIC offices from the anchorage. He spied a solitary figure standing on the balcony of a second story window and knew who it was; a man of shorter stature and a mind far more powerful and manipulative than imaginable.
Soon the ship’s boat was bobbing up and down next to the ship, its oars tossed, as the captain descended the <i>Wicked Wenche’s</i> side. The boat rose up on a swell right as his boot stretched out to find footing, making for a perfectly tense boarding as it nearly caused the captain to lose his balance. Once safely seated in the stern sheets, the longboat shoved off and began to pull for the stone jetty that was no more than two hundred yards away. As the men strived at their oars, the captain looked about at the other ships and waterfront with interest. His eye caught a man standing on the jetty waiting for him, a man in the company of several EIC marines. The captain looked down, obviously feeling guilt for something that nobody else knew of, his mouth turned down into a frown as a brow raised with nervous dread.
The boat tied up alongside the jetty and the captain awkwardly stepped out of the heaving boat, looking up to see the one who waited for him. This greeter seemed to be in his early forties, the corners of his mouth eyes lined with creases amassed over years of stern frowns. However, his eyes were piercing and bold. His attire was a simple, dark brown suit; black leather gloves adding to his ominous appearance.
“You’re late.” he said. His accent was that of the common working class, which no doubt helped him to blend in when carrying out spy work for his aristocratic employer.
“I am?” the captain asked in fake surprise.
The agent rolled his eyes and gestured for him to follow him down the jetty. “Sir Cutler wishes to see you immediately.” As the captain followed in suit, the marines flanked him in close company.
“Not much of a colorful welcoming party, eh?” the captain asked a marine. The marine merely tightened the grip on his musket and turned his knuckles white. The captain gave the slightest hint of a flinch and looked back to the office building. The party trooped up the steps to the front entrance, two sentries stamped to attention and admitted the agent and captain entrance.
The front hall was very large and ornate. A sweeping staircase led to the second story and doors lined the first floor’s walls. Large EIC flags, coats of arms, and oil paintings adorned the walls as an example of the Company’s might. The two ascended the stairs and turned down a blue paneled hallway. The stopped at a door on the far left.
The agent knocked once and an assertive voice replied, “You may enter.”
They stepped inside to see the short figure from the balcony. He was dressed in a dark red frock with black trim with well shined boots. His crisp, powdered wig was tied back neatly and his posture that of ‘delicate’ grace. His eyes were ambitious and confident.
“Ah, Mr. Sparrow…” his mouth turned up into something of a smirk, “Pray step forward.”
The captain named Sparrow slowly approached the desk. He almost said something, but kept his mouth shut.
The EIC tycoon had seen this and raised a brow in mock interest, “Yes Mr. Sparrow?” he looked to the agent upon no answer and nodded, “You may leave us Mr. Mercer.”
Once Mercer had left, Sparrow looked back to the other man, “I’d prefer to be called <i>Captain</i> Jack Sparrow, Sir Cutler. I am after all the captain of my own ship.”
Beckett pretended to look as if he cared, “That’s all? Its not what <i>I</i> would have said… perhaps something more along the lines of an explanation is needed? You’re shipment is two weeks late.”
Sparrow looked down without hanging his head, his mouth slightly open and his brow furrowed in thought, “Run in with a nasty squall…” he made an excuse, “…mizzen topmast went by the board and the forecourse split.”
“Indeed?” Beckett looked surprised as he examined the <i>Wicked Wench</i> through the window, “You’re a master carpenter. I cannot even see where the repairs were needed… you’re also a good <i>liar</i>.”
Sparrow’s face fell in defeat as Beckett came face to face with him smugly, “I’ll not have this Jack. You are a captain in the East India Company… and this running about upon your own endeavors must stop.”
Sparrow stood quietly as Beckett looked at his desk, “You are a weak asset to the Company.” he continued, “Your shipments are constantly overdue and often the cause of severe delays in the trade routes.” he looked back to Sparrow, “I should discharge you.”
Sparrow looked at Beckett with alarm, “But the <i>Wench</i>?! She’s the fastest ship you have! You can’t let me go?!”
Beckett’s face was that of a decisive repulse of that remark, “But your incompetence and late arrivals neutralize that. What I could do is discharge <i>you</i> and keep the ship.”
Sparrow looked desperately around the room, “But she’s all I’ve got… this employment is my living… what else could I do?”
Beckett sternly looked at Sparrow for a moment, in thought, “I’ll give you a chance to prove my assumptions false Sparrow… a chance to give me a reason to call you captain.”
Sparrow looked at the <i>Wench</i> with hope, “Just what do you think I need to do?”
“You’ll run a personal errand… one for my personal agenda.” Beckett began, “It’s the only chance you’ll get… so do not fail to take advantage of my graces and do as I commission.”
Sparrow grinned in appreciation, “You have my word, Sir Cutler!”
Beckett coolly looked at him, “Good. You’ll weigh anchor after having a chance to unload your hold and refit. Once at sea you shall proceed to the Ivory Coast where I have a certain… cargo… of personal importance to me.”
Sparrow nodded, “It shall be done.”
Beckett finally strode over to his desk and produced an order packet, “Present these to the Company agent once you arrive. He will do the rest.” Beckett looked at the door, “This meeting is over.”
Sparrow gave a light bow and turned to take his leave.
“Oh, actually… there’s something that I’ve forgotten.” Beckett stated.
The side door opened and an officer in an Armed Fleet uniform stepped into the office.
“This is Post-Captain Nathaniel Edwards.” Beckett began, “He was to take command of the <i>Wicked Wench</i> upon your discharge… but for now, he’ll accompany you as your second in command.”
“Captain Sparrow… Sir.” Captain Edwards warmly stepped forth and offered a hand, “Looking forward to serving with you.”
“Yes, he will be serving <i>with</i> you…” Beckett added, “Not under, nor over. He will take it upon himself to assume command and fulfill the tasking if you are found incompetent.”
Sparrow nodded, “Yes Sir Cutler. Captain…” Sparrow shook Edwards’ hand.
“May the wind fill your sails and assist you in a speedy voyage.” Beckett said, more of a warning to not deviate.
The captains nodded and Edwards smartly saluted, then they took their leave of the office.


<i>I think the question of how to make the audience believe that Beckett is bad and deserves to lose was raised earlier. Well, using the slaves for a personal endeavor would merit such a distaste from the audience.
I hope you guys liked it! GREAT work on the Mercer drawing there... Mercer! </i>
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Could you please not quote really long posts like my temporary draft in full? That prevents the thread from becoming overly long. It would also be appreciated if you don't add quotes in quotes into your posts. If you do end up with a quote in a quote, please remove it. I edited several posts to remove most of the quote so that the thread becomes easier to read.

Since you people like drawing, I think it would be a brilliant idea to make some storyboards or at least illustrations for our script once we made the finished version.

<!--quoteo(post=214815:date=Sep 19 2007, 10:40 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 19 2007, 10:40 PM) [snapback]214815[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->AAAh! Yes! The Batavia! I spent $650 to buy the kit for that, nice ship, upward sloping stern gallery nice design. Little low on the decorations im my opinion, but the Wasa! There's a highly decorated ship!<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->Personally I don't like the Batavia too much; I find her stern overly high and not wide enough and she really does lack decorations in the full-size replica as well. As you might deduce by my signature, I really like the Amsterdam. But still the Batavia is a good ship. Would be nice to use the replicas in our film. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":cheeky" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=214816:date=Sep 19 2007, 10:54 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 19 2007, 10:54 PM) [snapback]214816[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Of course you know that i will be commenting on scene 19.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->I would expect nothing less. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":cheeky" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" />
Seriously, my draft was a realy quick draft I did in a hurry. It will need MAJOR work. It even contains stuff I myself am not happy with. For example: I forgot to add Beckett branding Jack as a pirate. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/wacko.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":wacko:" border="0" alt="wacko.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=214816:date=Sep 19 2007, 10:54 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 19 2007, 10:54 PM) [snapback]214816[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Are we going with my plan for the battle? I like the idea of the pearl going one on one with norton, lets have him on the Amber along with Mercer in the intercepted fleet of eight ships to close the circle on the two ships. The Amber was de-masted in my draft of the battle, and Norton can be killed from a falling mast or splintering wood what ever you want.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->I haven't actually read your battle plan yet due to lack of time. I'll try to today. I think Norton should get killed partly because of Jack's involement, but I don't yet know how. Perhaps Jack ordered the cannon volley that killed him. That way we can just show a quick shot of Jack being sorry that Norton got killed and not make too much drama out of that scene.

If we decide to go with the sequel-to-AWE idea as well, we should take that into account for this battle. Personally I think we should show it mostly as a one-on-one battle between the Black Pearl and Norton's ship. The rest of the battle can be shown in the background, which would look really spectacular, while still being mostly a one-on-one battle.

<!--quoteo(post=214816:date=Sep 19 2007, 10:54 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 19 2007, 10:54 PM) [snapback]214816[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->That thing you said about the conflict between the EITC and the VOC would be nice, that would give Beckett reason to sail from England to protect his assets. He will go in style with most of his fleet at the time. After his fleet was destroyed by Jones, this does two things first it gives beckett the reason to seek Jones heart in DMC, also he will rebuild a larger fleet and sail against the VOC and other Dutch owned East India companies, thus aquiring his vast fleet of 300 ships that we will see in DMC. I like that Mercer would be given a larger role in this, i think he deserves to frighten the audience.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->Beckett doesn't strike me as a person who would really get involved in anything. I think he prefers to stay in his office in London. But if he gets such major trouble with the VOC thanks to Jack, that could be a reason why he would still come down to Indonesia to oversee things himself, despite him being mostly an office-person. This does imply though that Jack stays in Indonesia for several months, because there must be time between Jack's coming to Indonesia, Beckett learning what is going on and Beckett actually arriving in Indonesia. So then the question arises: What does Jack do in Indonesia that takes so long?

Perhaps we could even include the VOC in the final ship battle, just to get some added mayhem. I don't really want the VOC to lose the battle though, so I think it would be fun if Beckett would narrowly escape the Flying Dutchman and the VOC fleet with just one ship, the others being sunk. This would also make the odds for the Flying Dutchman somewhat more believable, so that it is not TOO obvious the Flying Dutchman is supernatural in this film. Perhaps we could also make something out of the link between the <b>Dutch</b> VOC and the Flying <b>Dutchman</b>. That would be something interesting to explore. And it would explain why Jack would learn about the Dutchman somewhere in a Dutch colony.

<!--quoteo(post=214834:date=Sep 20 2007, 01:55 AM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 20 2007, 01:55 AM) [snapback]214834[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I like it as well. A few questions though. Should we open on land or would it be better to open up with scene 3 then going back to 1? Picture the movie opening with a sail in the distance and the camera panning over the water and moving up on it fast and then panning around the ship till we see what looks to be Jack Sparrow at the helm. Then quickly go to English countryside and follow through with Scene 2 and then skip to scene 4 and now show the Wench sailing up the Thames.
Just a thought<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->The reasons I have for opening on land are twofold: 1) We open in a way you don't expect and 2) We don't open on Jack, because no other film so far has opened on Jack either. Personally I don't really like fast camera moves. If we were to do it that way, I would just have it as a slow camera move; I don't think fast fits in with the time setting. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=214834:date=Sep 20 2007, 01:55 AM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 20 2007, 01:55 AM) [snapback]214834[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->We will have to expand on how Jack decided to turn to piracy but I like the premise. Does he have a long talk with Tia, is he in conflict even before he gets to the Ivory Coast? Does he relay this to Norton?<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->Very good point and something that will definitely need to be thought about. I think there should be some talks with both Tia and Norton on the matter. Tia, of course, wants Jack to become a pirate and let the villagers go. Norton wants the opposite. That way we can show both sides of the arguments and explain it to the audience. Also: We should do it in such a way that it can be argued that Jack was a pirate even when he first appeared in the movie and that the whole working-for-Beckett thing was just an act. That way the audience can make up their own minds. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":cheeky" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=214834:date=Sep 20 2007, 01:55 AM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 20 2007, 01:55 AM) [snapback]214834[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I like the Nassau angle, kind of has the legendary sacking of Nassau without firing a shot sneak up on you. The audience won't be thinking that this is actually the event taking place until its over.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->Good point. That sounds brilliant. And it would be totally unexpected. I like to add many unexpected things into the film, be it small surprises or big surprises. I don't think the film should play out entirely as the audience expects. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=214834:date=Sep 20 2007, 01:55 AM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 20 2007, 01:55 AM) [snapback]214834[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I played with that idea also, having the last scene be of Hector Barbossa, maybe stepping out of the shadows and issuing a greeting to Jack.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->I personally think ending on Barbossa would be a good ending to the film, but there is one reservation: DMC ALSO ends on Barbossa, so wouldn't we be using the same ending twice? Unless it is a different member of Jack's crew we end with. Perhaps Bootstrap Bill instead of Barbossa. That might add some more interest and would be something different from the DMC ending.

<!--quoteo(post=214837:date=Sep 20 2007, 03:37 AM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 20 2007, 03:37 AM) [snapback]214837[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Guys, i think we should show how they became cursed, and why bootstrap went to serve on the dutchman. That would be interesting. To show these "sea turtles" they talk so much about. Just a thought, always wondered how that all went down.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->I'm sorry, but I have to disagree with you on this. We already know the answers to these questions. The Black Pearl crew got cursed because of taking gold from the chest of Cortez. The Flying Dutchman crew got cursed because of Davy Jones abandoning his duties. Bootstrap went to serve on the Dutchman because he couldn't move on the sea floor due to the pressure of the water, but couldn't die either. If we show all this in a film, it will be no surprise in the other films. Even worse, if we show it in a prequel, the audience when watching the other films will just think "shut up, I already know that! I've seen it!" when it's explained in the other films. Personally I think we don't need to show anything that is already adequately explained through dialogue or otherwise in the other films.
 
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