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Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

I think there should be EITC marines aboard the Wicked Wench to keep Jack and his crew in check. It was quite customary to have some soldiers aboard trading vessels, so that would solve that particular problem without the need of having a second ship there.
 
True. This will be a tricky scene. When will Jack find out about what the true nature of the cargo is? On land? Or should he find out about it before they leave the ship? That would be relevant regarding the marines.
 
On land, I'd say. Perhaps Mercer orders the marines ashore and Jack asks "what do we need them for?" and Mercer says "better safe than sorry" or something like that and then Jack goes to talk with Tia Dalma or the village leader when he is suddenly disturbed by screams of the EITC marines capturing the villagers. So Jack only really finds out at the last possible moment, though he <i>is</i> somewhat suspicious before.
 
I like that, Pieter. The part about Mercer ordering the marines on land beforehand and Jack, totally confused, asking what that is about. I think that's the way we should go. Make it on land then. Have Jack find out only when the screams of the villagers fill the air.
So Jack would be speaking with the village leader and he turns to find Mercer and questions him as to what is going on. Mercer orders him to load the "cargo" aboard the Wench. Jack protests. Edwards comes over, equally disturbed and asks about the legality of transporting slaves (since that would make them slave traders) and Mercer orders Jack again to load the cargo. Jack refuses and Mercer turns to Edwards.
 
Yeah that could be cool.
Jack and Tia Dalma are talking and all of a sudden, scremas and some gunshooting etc.

But do remind me, Mercer has no idea who is Tia and thats why he's capturing whole village.
Actualy nobody knows her. Right?
They just know that she is in that village and thats it.
 
<!--quoteo(post=248150:date=Mar 31 2008, 10:31 AM:name=gunsmith)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (gunsmith @ Mar 31 2008, 10:31 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=248150"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->But do remind me, Mercer has no idea who is Tia and thats why he's capturing whole village.
Actualy nobody knows her. Right?
They just know that she is in that village and thats it.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->I agree with that. That makes the most sense. Did we establish if Beckett intentionally wanted to get Tia through this whole endeavour or does Tia just happen to be a part of it (fate)? I think Beckett might have set this all up on purpose somehow. I think that's more evil. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/dev.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":d:" border="0" alt="dev.gif" />
 
Here's just some musings I had about how the scene would start off. This conversation could take place on the ship or on shore before they go into the village.


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Sparrow: (To Mercer) So, what's this mysterious cargo were picking up, mate?

Mercer: Its on a need to know basis, Mr. Sparrow.

Sparrow: (Very suspicious) What if I need to know now?

Mercer: (With a wry smile) Then you will need to wait.

Sparrow: (Frustrated, turns toward Edwards) Do we need this?

Mercer: Mr. Sparrow, this is a very sensitive mission, as you have been told. We cannot have it compromised in any way. You will know soon enough, as will Mr. Edwards.


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One thing, do we want Mercer giving instructions to have the marines go off the ship after Sparrow, Mercer and Edwards leave so Jack doesn't know about it and the first inkling he has of the marines presence is when he hears gunfire? Or do we have Mercer ordering Sparrow to have the marines come off the ship?
 
<b>MERCER
(angry)
We should have come upon turtle rock a day or so ago. Are your charts correct?

JACK
Absolutely. Navigation is not an exact science. There's plenty of variables that can delay one. Wind, current, weather conditions, absence of rum.

MERCER
(getting more angry)
I'd strongly advise you take corrective action.

JACK
Right. I'll get the rum.

MERCER
(Furious, draws his pistol)
Mr. Sparrow, would you like to be shot?

JACK
(smiles weakly)
I'd rather get the rum.

JACK
(holds a finger up)
Right. I'll get us there in a second.

SAILOR
(entering Jacks office)
Capt'n we have reached our destination.

Mercer looks angry at Jack.

Jack:
(smiles)
It's a gift mate.</b>

So is this it?
Or...
 
How's this? Just letting my imagination run wild here. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/razz.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":razz" border="0" alt="razz.gif" />

MERCER
(angry)
We should have come upon Turtle Rock several days ago! Beckett told me we'd be there on the 15th!

JACK
Well, Beckett doesn't know much about sailing a ship then, does he? Navigation is not an exact science.
There's plenty of variables that can delay one. Wind, current, weather conditions, absence of <i>rum</i>.

MERCER
(getting more angry)
You'd better do something about that!

JACK
(cheerfully)
Right. I'll get the rum.

MERCER
(Furious, draws his pistol)
Mr. Sparrow, would you like to be shot?

JACK
(still cheerful)
I'd rather get the rum.

MERCER
(gives Jack a stern look)

JACK
(holds a finger up)
Right. I'll summon some land for you straight away.

SAILOR
(entering Jack's office)
Capt'n! We have reached our destination.

Mercer looks angry at Jack.

JACK
(smiles)
It's a gift, mate.
 
Great add on, Gun!! I felt that scene was incomplete. I love that last line of Jack's. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
I added on a bit, its in italics.
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JACK
(smiles weakly)
I'd rather get the rum.

<i>MERCER
(cocks gun)</i>

JACK
(holds a finger up)
Right. I'll get us there in a second.

SAILOR
(entering Jacks office)
Capt'n we have reached our destination.

Mercer looks angry at Jack.

Jack:
(smiles)
It's a gift mate.

<i>MERCER
(holsters gun)
You'd better never lose it, Mr. Sparrow.</i>
 
I see we both put in some added dialogue, Pieter. I like the definitive date of the 15th.<img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="icon_wink.gif" />
 
I like Old Salt's closing line, but I slightly changed it anyway. Might be better, might not be. I'll leave that up to you. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/doff.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":doff" border="0" alt="doff.gif" />
So with Old Salt's and my additions both added, that makes it:

MERCER
(angry)
We should have come upon Turtle Rock several days ago! Beckett told me we'd be there on the 15th!

JACK
Well, Beckett doesn't know much about sailing a ship then, does he? Navigation is not an exact science.
There's plenty of variables that can delay one. Wind, current, weather conditions, absence of <i>rum</i>.

MERCER
(getting more angry)
You'd better do something about that!

JACK
(cheerfully)
Right. I'll get the rum.

MERCER
(Furious, draws his pistol)
Mr. Sparrow, would you like to be shot?

JACK
(still cheerful)
I'd rather get the rum.

MERCER
(cocks gun)

JACK
(holds a finger up)
Right. I'll summon some land for you straight away.

SAILOR
(entering Jack's office)
Capt'n! We have reached our destination.

MERCER
(gives Jack a stern look)

JACK
(smiles)
It's a gift, mate.

MERCER
(holsters gun)
I hope you never lose it, Mr. Sparrow.
For YOUR sake!
 
I like it, Pieter. You know, that bit in the middle when Jack says he'll summon some land right away, didn't we have that already in another variation of this scene that was posted some months ago? It seems familiar. Anyway, the scene seems more complete now, I see you filled out some of the other sentences. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=248452:date=Apr 1 2008, 04:22 PM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Old Salt @ Apr 1 2008, 04:22 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=248452"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->You know, that bit in the middle when Jack says he'll summon some land right away, didn't we have that already in another variation of this scene that was posted some months ago? It seems familiar.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->Indeed I just re-used that line from my original rewrite of that scene as seen <a href="http://forum.piratesahoy.net//index.php?s=&showtopic=10925&view=findpost&p=224287" target="_blank">here</a>. Though I did exclude the "Who do you think I am? Poseidon?" bit this time.
 
Combining the original version of the scene with the recent rewrite and re-adding the next scene from the original rewrite, albeit in rewritten form (are you still with me?), you get this:

INT. WICKED WENCH, JACKS OFFICE - DAY

Jack is seen standing in his office, with his back to the door, looking through the stern windows.
Footsteps are heard. Jack turns his head slightly towards the door.
Mercer opens the door agressively and enters.


MERCER
(angry)
Mr. Sparrow. Are we running late? Again?!


JACK
Of course not. CAPTAIN Jack Sparrow is never late.


MERCER
Oh really? We should have come upon Turtle Rock several days ago! Beckett told me we'd be there on the 15th!
(pointing at him)


JACK
(turning to face Mercer)
Well, Beckett doesn't know much about sailing a ship then, does he? Navigation is not an exact science.
There's plenty of variables that can delay one. Wind, current, weather conditions, absence of <i>rum</i>.


MERCER
(getting more angry)
You'd better do something about that!


JACK
(cheerfully)
Right. I'll get the rum.


MERCER
(furious, draws his pistol)
Mr. Sparrow, would you like to be shot?


JACK
(still cheerful)
I'd rather get the rum.


MERCER
(cocks gun)


JACK
(holds up a finger)
Right. I'll summon some land for you straight away.


SAILOR
(entering Jack's office)
Capt'n! We have reached our destination.


MERCER
(gives Jack a stern look)


JACK
(smiles)
It's a gift, mate.


MERCER
(holsters gun)
I hope you never lose it, Mr. Sparrow.
For YOUR sake!


EXT. WICKED WENCH, MAIN DECK

Jack and Mercer walk out of Jack's office and onto the deck.
Edwards is looking through his spyglass.
Jack grabs his own spyglass and looks.


JACK
(giving his spyglass to Mercer)
There's your Turtle Rock.


Mercer grumbles as he takes the spyglass. Clearly he is disappointed.


JACK
Very impressive, Mr. Edwards. Impeccable timing.
(to the sailors)
Prepare the boats for landing!


EDWARDS
Aye aye, captain!
 
We need a reference of Turtle Rock earlier in the script so the audience also knows where they're going. Otherwise the mention of Turtle Rock comes completely out of the blue, which would be weird. Possible points could be Beckett's briefing of Jack or Jack reading his orders after setting sail.
 
How about....


XT. WICKED WENCH, MAIN DECK

Jack and Mercer walk out of Jack's office and onto the deck.
Edwards is looking through his spyglass.
Jack grabs his own spyglass and looks.


JACK
(giving his spyglass to Mercer)
There's your Turtle Rock.

<i>MERCER
(Grumbles as he takes the spyglass.)
I so wanted to shoot you.</i>

JACK
<i>(Gives Mercer a look)</i>
Very impressive, Mr. Edwards. Impeccable timing.
(to the sailors)
Prepare the boats for landing!


EDWARDS
Aye aye, captain!
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Changes in italics.

<!--quoteo(post=248457:date=Apr 1 2008, 11:02 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Apr 1 2008, 11:02 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=248457"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->We need a reference of Turtle Rock earlier in the script so the audience also knows where they're going. Otherwise the mention of Turtle Rock comes completely out of the blue, which would be weird. Possible points could be Beckett's briefing of Jack or Jack reading his orders after setting sail.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
I think I bought that up last week. We do need a reference to it. And I do think the briefing is the best place to fit it in. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />
 
"I so wanted to shoot you."
^ I wonder if Mercer really needs to say that. He can also act disappointed and get the message across without actually saying it. Somehow it sounds really weird to me to have him actually say that, though he clearly <i>thinks</i> that.
 
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