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Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

<!--quoteo(post=217669:date=Oct 14 2007, 04:40 PM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Oct 14 2007, 04:40 PM) [snapback]217669[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->No problem, Mercer. I know we are only in the beginning of the script, I was thinking more of a summary of some of the other ideas that have been being bandied about for later on in the movie and for the sequel. I'll look through the thread and see if I can highlight some of those ideas and then maybe Pieter can link that post.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Sorry everyone i have not checked in, i have a very busy week, abnormally busy, and my time to work on the script is constrained so i am working on it any chance i have, but i am just piled busy so forgive me if i dont check in for a bit.
 
<img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/william.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":will" border="0" alt="william.gif" /> Heres the newest portion of the script. PLEASE COMMENT. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />


INT. BECKETTS OFFICE - DAY

Sparrow is escorted in with Mercer entering from behind.

BECKETT
(Looking out a
window)
Mr. Sparrow...


JACK
(Slightly Insulted)
Captain...Captain Sparrow.


BECKETT
"Captain" Sparrow, I see you were
able to find you're way here.


JACK
I had a little help.
(Glances Nervously
at Mercer)


BECKETT
Maybe that's all one needs; a
little help.
(Turning around)
So, I find yet another shipment is
late as are you.


JACK
A man is never late...'e's just
not early.


BECKETT
Is that so? Well seeing that you
are never early which could
possibly mean that you are never
(MORE)




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5.


BECKETT (cont'd)
on time then why should I still
employ you?


JACK
(Astonished)
Because! I'm Captain Jack Sparrow.


BECKETT
Oh, yes, how could I have
forgotten. I am getting terrible
at forgetting things, but there is
something despite that, that I
have not forgotten. That being a
mission for you, one last chance
to prove yourself.
(Begins pouring
Brandy for
Captain Sparrow)


JACK
Ah, proving oneself, 'tis the act
of showing another that he can do
things right...
(Grabbs a goblet
containing Brandy)
...with the proper compensation.
In doing things right he therefore
shows the other that he has in
fact been proven. Eh?
(Empties goblet)


BECKETT
Why of course Captain, it is just
good buisness.


JACK
(Pouring another
cup of brandy)
Were I in a busy mood, what then
might i busy myself with?


BECKETT
There is a shipment of great
importance to the East India
Trading Company, and me. I cannot
discuss the contents, but you will
see when you get there. Mercer and
another individual: Post Captain
Edwards winn accompany you on this
endevour to ensure its speedy
transport.




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6.


JACK
(Chokes on brandy
after hearing of
Mercers job)
Well, we...I. Thats perfect I will
ensure that no one is disappointed
at all, saavy?


BECKETT
Good, Mercer and Edwards will be
with you shortly.


JACK
(Smiling
disarmingly)
Thank you kind sir.


Sparrow and Mercer both walk out of the room.



FADE OUT.
 
BECKETT (cont'd)
on time then why should I still
employ you?


JACK
(Astonished)
Because! I'm Captain Jack Sparrow.

<i>BECKETT
(Quickly)
For the moment you are.

JACK
What do you mean by that, eh?

BECKETT
(Looking sternly at Jack)
The Wench can sail with or without you at the helm.

JACK
(Desperate)
But I'm the only one who can coax the speed out of her sails.</i>

BECKETT
Oh, yes, how could I have
forgotten. I am getting terrible
at forgetting things, but there is
something despite that, that I
have not forgotten. That being a
mission for you, one last chance
to prove yourself.
(Begins pouring
Brandy for
Captain Sparrow)


JACK
Ah, proving oneself, 'tis the act
of showing another that he can do
things right...
(Grabbs a goblet
containing Brandy)
...with the proper compensation.
In doing things right he therefore
shows the other that he has in
fact been proven. Eh?
(Empties goblet)


BECKETT
Why of course Captain, it is just
good buisness.


JACK
(Pouring another
cup of brandy)
Were I in a busy mood, what then
might i busy myself with?


I added a few lines of dialogue in italics, I just thought that maybe Beckett should dress Jack down a bit more before offering him the chance to redeem himself with another mission. What do you think?
 
<!--quoteo(post=217767:date=Oct 15 2007, 05:58 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Oct 15 2007, 05:58 PM) [snapback]217767[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Sorry everyone i have not checked in, i have a very busy week, abnormally busy, and my time to work on the script is constrained so i am working on it any chance i have, but i am just piled busy so forgive me if i dont check in for a bit.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
No problem, Mercer, we all get busy. Don't feel you need to rush just to get something out to us.
 
<!--quoteo--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->JACK
(Astonished)
Because! I'm Captain Jack Sparrow.

<i>BECKETT
(Quickly)
For the moment you are.

JACK
What do you mean by that, eh?

BECKETT
(Looking sternly at Jack)
The Wench can sail with or without you at the helm.

JACK
(Desperate)
But I'm the only one who can coax the speed out of her sails.</i>


I added a few lines of dialogue in italics, I just thought that maybe Beckett should dress Jack down a bit more before offering him the chance to redeem himself with another mission. What do you think?<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Good i will modify it right away. Yes, I just whipped this up today, and this is what i am looking for when i ask for people to add to it. Just like you did, i need to know sometimes wh.t needs to be added or changed. That is the best way to make a GRRREAT! Script! (Yes, it does reference to Tony the Tiger).
 
I agree. I'm exhausted so let me look again at the script with a fresh eye tomorrow. Don't worry, your not alone in this.
 
BECKETT (cont'd)
on time then why should I still
employ you?

JACK
(Astonished)
Because! I'm Captain Jack Sparrow.

BECKETT
(Quickly)
For the moment you are.

JACK
What do you mean by that, eh?

BECKETT
(Looking sternly at Jack)
The Wench can sail with or without you at the helm.

JACK
(Desperate)
But I'm the only one who can coax the speed out of her sails.

BECKETT
Oh, yes, how could I have
forgotten. I am getting terrible
at forgetting things, but there is
something despite that, that I
have not forgotten.

<i>JACK
(Obviously uncomfortable)
What is that then, eh?</i>

BECKETT
(Emphatically)
<i>That</i> being a
mission for you, one last chance
as it were.

<i>JACK
(Smiles weakly)

BECKETT
Are you up to the task, captain?
(he pauses for emphasis) Or will
you let me down again, Mr. Sparrow?

JACK
(The dropping of his title at the end
of Beckett's sentence not lost on
him, Jack replies quickly)
Always up to not letting you down.

BECKETT
Good. Good.
(Begins pouring
Brandy for
Captain Sparrow)
Then I hope you will
prove to me that I entrusted this
assignment to the right man.</i>

JACK
(Feeling better about the situation)
Ah, proving oneself, 'tis the act
of showing another that he can do
things right...
(Grabbs a goblet
containing Brandy)
...with the proper compensation.
In doing things right he therefore
shows the other that he has in
fact been proven. Eh?
(Empties goblet)


BECKETT
Why of course Captain, it is just
good buisness.


JACK
(Pouring another
cup of brandy)
Were I in a busy mood, what then
might i busy myself with?

Looking at this scene again, I thought that the lines I added last night made your line that followed a little awkward so I split it up a bit and added some more lines just to see if it flows better. I think this might work. I wanted Jack to establish his composure again somewhat after Beckett's threats so that he could feel comfortable enough uttering his Jackspeak again, which he does brilliantly, Mercer, when you have him going off on his "proving himself" soliloquy.
Again, these are just suggestions, but I think it will work.
 
for some reason those added lines don't really sound like them. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->JACK
(The dropping of his title at the end
of Beckett's sentence not lost on
him, Jack replies quickly)
Always up to not letting you down.


Looking at this scene again, I thought that the lines I added last night made your line that followed a little awkward so I split it up a bit and added some more lines just to see if it flows better. I think this might work. I wanted Jack to establish his composure again somewhat after Beckett's threats so that he could feel comfortable enough uttering his Jackspeak again, which he does brilliantly, Mercer, when you have him going off on his "proving himself" soliloquy.
Again, these are just suggestions, but I think it will work.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Always up to not letting you down, LOL thats good! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" /> Thats priceless LOL. I love that for some reason. Those lines are good, and that "soliloquy" of the proving himself i didnt even think about it just kind of went into my hands as i visualized what Jack would say next. Beckett is calculating with big words, and a very...aristocratic way of speach. You know old Jack likes to say things to have you stop and think WHAT? With his tongue-twisting voicing.

Also, Morgan, those lines dont sound like the <i>pirate</i> Jack, since he is an EITC captain i wanted a sense of professionalism around him, and come to think about it, Lord Beckett is not actually "Lord" Beckett. Remember how governer swann says "Cutler Beckett" and he says "Its Lord now, actually,". So just something to brainstorm on: His lower title.
 
<!--quoteo(post=217996:date=Oct 17 2007, 03:16 PM:name=Commodore John Paul Jones)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Commodore John Paul Jones @ Oct 17 2007, 03:16 PM) [snapback]217996[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Sir Cutler Beckett.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Beautiful. Glad to hear from you Commodore, you were MIA lately.
 
<!--quoteo(post=217995:date=Oct 17 2007, 05:09 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Oct 17 2007, 05:09 PM) [snapback]217995[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Always up to not letting you down, LOL thats good! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" /> Thats priceless LOL. I love that for some reason. Those lines are good, and that "soliloquy" of the proving himself i didnt even think about it just kind of went into my hands as i visualized what Jack would say next. Beckett is calculating with big words, and a very...aristocratic way of speach. You know old Jack likes to say things to have you stop and think WHAT? With his tongue-twisting voicing.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Exactly, Mercer. As I said earlier, I noticed right away you had Jack's speech pattern down cold. Its not easy. And you nailed it with that bit about proving himself. You can see Jack spilling that sentence out slowly as he picks up the goblet and then ending his thought process with that little twist before downing the wine. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/thumbs1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":2up" border="0" alt="thumbs1.gif" />
Glad you liked that "Always up" line. I had been thinking about some tongue-twisting reply that Jack could give and I typed that and had to read it a few times to make sure it made sense. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="xD:" border="0" alt="laugh.gif" /> I wanted to get "up" and "down" in the same sentence.

<!--quoteo(post=217995:date=Oct 17 2007, 05:09 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Oct 17 2007, 05:09 PM) [snapback]217995[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Also, Morgan, those lines dont sound like the <i>pirate</i> Jack, since he is an EITC captain i wanted a sense of professionalism around him, and come to think about it, Lord Beckett is not actually "Lord" Beckett. Remember how governer swann says "Cutler Beckett" and he says "Its Lord now, actually,". So just something to brainstorm on: His lower title.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Right. I was careful not to have Jack address Beckett as "Lord" although I was tempted too. I didn't think that would have been his title in the prequel. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" />
 
right. makes sense. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />
 
I've been reading all along... lurking in the shadows... <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="wink.gif" /> Mostly because I haven't found anything lately that seems odd or needing discussion... everything's running so smoothly! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" />
So do we have a next scene that's concrete enough for me to write in novel format? So far I have Jack anchoring and recieving his mission from Beckett, then it cuts off.
Will we suddenly cut to the open ocean on the mission or will Jack do something in London... like fitting out the <i>Wench</i> or looking for some innocent trouble?
 
I liked Mercer's scene where Jack loads the rum aboard the Wench and checks the contents of the crate, just to be sure. Could be a fun little scene between Jack leaving Beckett's office and the Wench being at sea. Alternatively we could add a grandiose setting sail scene like in the 1962 Mutiny on the Bounty version. I like that scene. Cutting straight from Beckett's office to the Wench at sea would be a bit too sudden for my taste. We need at least a little something inbetween.
 
<!--quoteo(post=218139:date=Oct 18 2007, 04:12 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Pieter Boelen @ Oct 18 2007, 04:12 PM) [snapback]218139[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I liked Mercer's scene where Jack loads the rum aboard the Wench and checks the contents of the crate, just to be sure. Could be a fun little scene between Jack leaving Beckett's office and the Wench being at sea. Alternatively we could add a grandiose setting sail scene like in the 1962 Mutiny on the Bounty version. I like that scene. Cutting straight from Beckett's office to the Wench at sea would be a bit too sudden for my taste. We need at least a little something inbetween.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
I completely forgot about that. Sorry. I didnt know if I made the scene clear enough, it seemed a bit cloudy to me. He is supposed to just run up, grab a bottle, and "Carry on Gents,". And he is supposed to run with is arms waving, you know, the works of Jack. I will add it.
 
<!--quoteo(post=218141:date=Oct 18 2007, 08:01 PM:name=Commodore John Paul Jones)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Commodore John Paul Jones @ Oct 18 2007, 08:01 PM) [snapback]218141[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Exactly my point... a cut right to the voyage seems a bit too fast for me.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Right, we need filler so the scenes don't stumble into one another.
 
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