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Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

Okay, i have voted for the commodores script before, i just put this on because i thought i hadnt really contributed to the opening. I think it WOULD work well for the sequel. Thats very good. Pieter, i just followed your script because i wanted to post that Scene I thing. I will definately be looking for new sub-plot ideas for the script. Your guys help would be great! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="icon_wink.gif" /> Remember that no idea is stupid. So i will keep that idea for the first scene for the sequel, but i will now just start with the english countryside idea. Dont worry Pieter i have some ideas of my own to put in there.
 
<!--quoteo--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Commodore, this is an OUTLINE. I am just putting something out there to see if any ideas flare. Dont be offended. Again, i just thought of this and put it out there. I still use the english country setting. Is that okay? I am sorry if it offended you REALLY SORRY!<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->

Oh no, not offended at all. I was just confused because I thought we had moved on already. I was asking "Wait... did I miss something?! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/blink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":blink:" border="0" alt="blink.gif" /> "
<img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="xD:" border="0" alt="laugh.gif" />

I think we should have the singing Mercer, but who is singing it? Where? Perhaps a sort of sea shanty from the crew as they work?

And the next scene... what will it be? My fingers itch to type... <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile2.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":))" border="0" alt="smile2.gif" />

(What about <i>Pirates of the Caribbean: Hoist the Colours</i>? It focuses on Jack's hoisting the black flag and can be connected to AWE.)
 
That's not a bad title at all. Much less predictable than "The Legend of Jack Sparrow". And it doesn't have a character's name in it either. I like it. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":cheeky" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" />

I think the sailor sea shanty would be the most obvious possibility for adding the singing. If we do add the sea shanty, perhaps the song should be a custom new sea shanty that foreshadows some of the events to occur in the movie(s). I personally would suggest always trying to come up with alternatives for anything that is obvious though. Sometimes the obvious thing is the best thing, but often also the surprising and non-obvious turns out to work much better. So which category do we have here? Is the sailor sea shanty the best idea or can we come up with something different?
 
<!--quoteo(post=215931:date=Sep 29 2007, 01:45 PM:name=Commodore John Paul Jones)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Commodore John Paul Jones @ Sep 29 2007, 01:45 PM) [snapback]215931[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec--><!--quoteo--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Commodore, this is an OUTLINE. I am just putting something out there to see if any ideas flare. Dont be offended. Again, i just thought of this and put it out there. I still use the english country setting. Is that okay? I am sorry if it offended you REALLY SORRY!<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->

Oh no, not offended at all. I was just confused because I thought we had moved on already. I was asking "Wait... did I miss something?! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/blink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":blink:" border="0" alt="blink.gif" /> "
<img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="xD:" border="0" alt="laugh.gif" />

I think we should have the singing Mercer, but who is singing it? Where? Perhaps a sort of sea shanty from the crew as they work?

And the next scene... what will it be? My fingers itch to type... <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile2.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":))" border="0" alt="smile2.gif" />

(What about <i>Pirates of the Caribbean: Hoist the Colours</i>? It focuses on Jack's hoisting the black flag and can be connected to AWE.)
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Okay, but dont use that poem, it would sound great in the sequel. Along with my idea for the 1st Scene. Okay, that would work, that was just a temporary title for my script. I like that Pirates of the Caribbean Hoist the Colors. NIIIIICE! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
Don't worry; a poem as sea shanty probably wouldn't sound good. Better to keep it as a poem for the AWE sequel opening scene and make a new shanty for the prequel. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=215843:date=Sep 29 2007, 06:34 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Pieter Boelen @ Sep 29 2007, 06:34 AM) [snapback]215843[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Also: Starting out the film with a battle isn't half as surprising as starting out the film on the English countryside.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
That reminds me of the beginning of Indiana Jones and the Temple of Doom. It opened up in a club and was so out of place that you wondered if you were watching the right movie, then you saw Harrison Ford and were reassured. It did have shock value though and having a beginning like the one Pieter described for the prequel would be unpredictable and catch the audience off guard, thereby piquing their interest early.
<!--quoteo(post=215843:date=Sep 29 2007, 06:34 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Pieter Boelen @ Sep 29 2007, 06:34 AM) [snapback]215843[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->The PotC films always have a character singing in one of the early scenes. In CotBP the film begins with Elizabeth singing "A Pirate's Life for Me", DMC has Mr. Gibbs singing "Fifteen Men On A Dead Man's Chest" and AWE has Elizabeth singing "Hoist the Colours High". There must be some character or characters singing in either the first or second scene of our movie. Perhaps Jack's crew when they sail up the Thames? Sailors are known to sing while they work.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
I guess the singing could be a good way to link the films with the original three.
<!--quoteo(post=215843:date=Sep 29 2007, 06:34 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Pieter Boelen @ Sep 29 2007, 06:34 AM) [snapback]215843[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->As far as my draft is concerned: You don't need to abide to it completely. It's just a very vague temporary outline that can still be modified ad infinitum. So don't hold off from posting something that might conflict with my quick draft. It might be better than what I came up with. After all I did write the thing in about half an hour.. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/whistling.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":wp" border="0" alt="whistling.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Sometimes the best ideas are written off the cuff like that.
 
<!--quoteo(post=215966:date=Sep 29 2007, 08:32 PM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 29 2007, 08:32 PM) [snapback]215966[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->That reminds me of the beginning of Indiana Jones and the Temple of Doom. It opened up in a club and was so out of place that you wondered if you were watching the right movie, then you saw Harrison Ford and were reassured. It did have shock value though and having a beginning like the one Pieter described for the prequel would be unpredictable and catch the audience off guard, thereby piquing their interest early.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Piquing...wow...that is a tough word, i had to look it up, so explain to us simpletons the true nature of this. Are you saying we <i>should</i> in fact start in the countryside, or no. My vocabulary is quite impecable, but that was a toughy. Piquing...i have never heard that used in that context before, i have actually never heard it used period. Are you saying it would irritate, or excite, or wound (doubt it), or to "arouse an emotion to provoke action"?
 
I meant it as a verb, as in <i>stimulating the audiences interest.</i> Sorry about that, Mercer, that word just popped into my head as I wrote that sentence, I didn't think it was anything special. I certainly wasn't suggesting anything by using it.
 
<!--quoteo(post=215941:date=Sep 29 2007, 04:36 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Pieter Boelen @ Sep 29 2007, 04:36 PM) [snapback]215941[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I personally would suggest always trying to come up with alternatives for anything that is obvious though. Sometimes the obvious thing is the best thing, but often also the surprising and non-obvious turns out to work much better.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Exactly, I'd subscribe to that. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=215966:date=Sep 30 2007, 03:32 AM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Old Salt @ Sep 30 2007, 03:32 AM) [snapback]215966[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->That reminds me of the beginning of Indiana Jones and the Temple of Doom. It opened up in a club and was so out of place that you wondered if you were watching the right movie, then you saw Harrison Ford and were reassured. It did have shock value though and having a beginning like the one Pieter described for the prequel would be unpredictable and catch the audience off guard, thereby piquing their interest early.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->Very true indeed. That's exactly what I thought when I first saw that film. Well done Steven Spielberg! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
We have one small contingency to adress before we start on scene 2. Should we show the conversation between beckett and Edwards, or should we not, and just let the audience know it happened?
 
well, maybe the audience should know a little bit about what's going on. i don't think the conversation should be left out, at least not entirely.
 
Which conversation between Beckett and Edwards are we talking about here? What is the information we need to get accross the audience in such a scene?
 
<!--quoteo(post=216121:date=Sep 30 2007, 08:43 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Pieter Boelen @ Sep 30 2007, 08:43 AM) [snapback]216121[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Which conversation between Beckett and Edwards are we talking about here? What is the information we need to get accross the audience in such a scene?<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
When Edwards first shows up at the EITC headquarters and Mercer escorts him in. We are conveying that Beckett is beginning to get annoyed with Sparrow, and that he has a mission of great importance that need be done. Beckett, needing one person in this cargo (Tia Dalma) wants no mess ups, so he will send Mercer to shadow the Wench all of the way there, and escort the wench back to London. Edwards will be on the Wench getting close to Sparrow to quell any suspicions of his. I dont think we should show this for a number of minor logistics reasons, but also because that just outlines the next 40 minutes of movie. We should show them having an in audiable conversation. Or maybe as Mercer escorts Edwards in Beckett greets them "Ah, Mr. Edwards, i have a mission for you," And offers him a glass of brandy. Then we go to the Wench with Sparrow clinging to the bowsprit, and that rat-tat-tat drum beat, until it picks up with that song they play everytime they introduce Sparrow into the movie. You know on the dinghy in COBP, in the coffin in DMC, or on the top of the mainmast in AWE. That is what i am thinking of doing for Scene 2.
 
If it would make it easier for anyone, i could draw up a chart of say...oh...20-25 scenes, and put a little line of info under each, like scene 17: Battle. And we fill it in as we go along, if i do this you might want to copy and paste it to a MS word application. It will have less info than Pieters outline. This is STRICTLY for logistics and planning purposes.
 
I think that if Mercer welcomes Edwards and they walk up the stairs of the EITC headquarters, that is clear enough. Especially when Beckett assigns Edwards as Jack's First Officer later. The way Commodore John Paul Jones described that scene makes it pretty clear what Beckett wants Edwards to do.
 
<!--quoteo(post=213758:date=Sep 6 2007, 07:27 PM:name=Mercer)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mercer @ Sep 6 2007, 07:27 PM) [snapback]213758[/snapback]</div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->The crew rushes about prepping to dock.

The camera pans to the back of Sparrow’s ship and you see the name “Wicked Wench”.

The ship continues on, but the camera turns right to see the stern of a large ship of the line with the name “Endeavor” on it.

As the Wench pulls alongside the dock Sparrow waltzes down with a bit less of a drunk mans sway.

He walks along the deck and steps on the gangplank just as it is set down.

As he steps off of the gangplank Mercer and a few guards bar his way.

MERCER: You’re late.

SPARROW: A man is never late, just not early.

Mercer scoffs.

MERCER: You know, Lord Beckett is growing impatient of your apparent inability to appear on time. He sent me to make sure you appear before him on time.

SPARROW: I’m here aren’t I?

Mercer draws pistol and cocks it, but doesn’t aim at Sparrow, he nods and the guards grab Sparrow they “help” him to Beckett’s office. Mercer follows behind with his pistol pointed in the air. They arrive at Beckets office. Beckett is seated behind his desk looking over a paper. He sets it down and motions Sparrow in. The guards release him and he rubs his wrist.

BECKETT: Ah, Captain Sparrow, so nice of you to show up.

Mercer walks in.

SPARROW: I had a little help.

He glances nervously at Mercer.

BECKETT: I will assume that all of the shipment arrived intact.

SPARROW: As crisp as it was when we left.

BECKETT: I’m sure. Well I shouldn’t dance around why I had you brought here, you won’t be in Singapore long, I have another shipment being loaded in a small port in New Spain, the transport which name I will not mention yet is to be escorted by you back to Singapore undamaged, do I make my self clear.

SPARROW: Crystal clear, mate. I am going to need ammunition for my ship, and some extra comforts to help the long voyage go easily, savvy?

He glances at a barrel of rum in the corner. Beckett notices this.

BECKETT: You will have the ammunition and what ever else it is that satisfies you.

SPARROW: Perfect we will set sail as soon as the rum is loaded…along with the ammunition.

Sparrow spins around and walks out of the room. The guards close the doors. Mercer who was previously looking out the window, turns toward Beckett and takes off his hat.

BECKETT TO MERCER: Mercer, I need you to take a frigate and follow Sparrow’s ship the whole round trip, without him noticing. If he deviates or does anything to endanger the shipment you know what to do.

Mercer gives a sinister smile.

MERCER: Sooner or later it will have to be done.

He walks out of the room. Beckett picks up a paper and continues reading. Now the camera pans to the docks and you see Sparrow walking with his distinctive sway, then he stops dead when he sees the rum being loaded, he starts running.

SPARROW WHILE WAVING HANDS ALL ABOUT: Oi! Wait! Stop!

He stops at one of the boxes of rum bottles being loaded. Sparrow then opens it, and then grabs a bottle.

SPARROW: Carry on, gents.

In the background you clearly see Mercer and several detachments of marines headed for the frigate, but Mercer turns down the dock where the Wench is docked.

MERCER TO SPARROW: Mr. Sparrow, let’s make sure that you understand that you are not to dock at your destination, you will wait at the mouth of the harbor for the transport, and then escort it back to here, do you understand?

SPARROW: Quite hard not to. Now, just so I know, what exactly is the transport…transporting?

Mercer hands Sparrow a sealed letter as he addresses him.

MERCER: That is not for you to know, here are your orders.

Sparrow takes the paper.

SPARROW: Ah, well in that case: All hands prepare to set sail! Raise the anchor, cast off the lines, you know Oi! Oi! Oi! And the like.

He walks up the gangplank while saying this. Upon reaching the deck you see Sparrow toss the letter off into the harbor as he continues to shout. The ship sets sail into a choppy sea. The screen fades black, and all sound is drowned out.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
I think a small scene, such as the one Mercer outlined, wouldn't do any harm. I like the way Mercer caught Sparrow's personality here and it does offer up a quick explanation. Maybe a marriage of the two scenes already written where Beckett and Sparrow meet, by Commodore and Mercer.
 
Aye, that would work, I am sure the Commodore is willing to work something out with me to make a good scene. (Commodore will probably do better than me, he's a far better writer than me for sure! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="icon_wink.gif" /> ) But, i will see what i can dig up, and i will get that, and that 25 scene outline done, that can be filled in as we go along.
 
Well, since were writing this in screenplay form we don't have to go heavy on the imagery, its going to be the dialogue that's important and you have Sparrow down cold.
 
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